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[anne35]

How would you describe the sound of footsteps; big heavy footsteps of a certain villainous character?
Also, let's say that  these footsteps coincided or joined in with something else. Would you just say that these two things coincided or that they were in sync. or what?

Hope this made sense. Much thanks in advance.

Comments

[anonymous]

(Themus says)

Heavy is a good word. I'd generally go with something along those lines. Anything that gives an idea of weight and therefore size. So: heavy, clomping steps; the loud tread of heavy boots; thick, thumping footsteps etc. etc.

As for the other, I'd probably go with 'merged'.

[anonymous]

Oh, btw: *squeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee*

[anne35]

The next chapter has already been looked at by Loracj. I'm in the process of implementing her changes, fine-tuning some lines, and adding a few other. With a little luck, I should have it up sometime tomorrow.

A word of warning, don't get your hopes up too much. This chapter is extremely short. If it was a television show, it would be the short scene before they run the opening credits.

[anne35]

I like the sound of clumping and thumping. I definitely think Art would be a "clumping" kind of guy.

[fredsmith518]

wanta email the line, cariad? I can't think in the abstract!

also, I write ??? when I can't think of the word I want and get on with the writing and come back to th etricky word!

[anne35]

Thanks again for the comments and suggestion. They make for a much needed improvement.

[smc36]

Don't know -- but I can agree with ANONYMOUS SQUEE

[anne35]

You might want to save your squeeing until after you read the chapter. It's very, very short and not much happens. However, there is a slight cliffhanger at the end that lets you know there's finally some action in the next.
I'm hoping to get it up by tomorrow night.

[willwork4dean]

I would say "the heavy thud of footsteps echoed the pounding of his heart." 'Cause that's all poetic and stuff.

[anne35]

That is quite poetic and I think you just helped me out on a completely different line that I was unhappy with.

Thanks ever so much!