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panda3035 June 16 2008, 21:21:58 UTC
welll grammer wise yes, i see some mistakes. but i love it anyways!

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anjin_no_sekai June 16 2008, 23:24:45 UTC
Thanks! ^^

And I lmao with your avi!! xDDDDD

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kazu_ya June 17 2008, 14:54:35 UTC
y lo leí cuando debería estar haciendo otra cosa .__.!

pero wenop, me gusto, aunque de verdad, leyendo revistas, entrevistas y todo, no puedo imaginarme a YamaPi con un hombre xD
en serio que no puedo ò__ó!
ya quizás con Kame, pero el resto no y aún no veo HanaKimi :llora:

Maki~

ya saluditos, estamos hablando :eh

cuidate

bye bye!!!

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anjin_no_sekai June 17 2008, 16:28:19 UTC
Con Kame?????
xDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Naaa... TomaPi Forever!! Además Yamapi es el q inventó lo de TomaPi y Tomayama o.o Si ama a Toma xDD Con su vida xD

A qué vino TomaPi? no sé, pero Tomayama se le ocurrió por Tegomass... Lendoh!! *O* xD

Además Tomo le hace el gusto en todo a Toma oO
Toma dice "qro comer vegetales escabeche" en una entrada de su blog y Yamapi de inmediato "te llevo cuando quieras" en el suyo

O sea!!! Nadie puede xDDDDDDDD

TOMAPI RABU CHYU NYU!!

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kireira June 18 2008, 14:26:48 UTC
Sweet. =) I think the plot progression is good, though the ending may be a bit sappy for my taste. =P Uhm, the punctuation needs some work (you're missing full-stops/commas in most of the dialogues) and I think the use of "..." is rather excessive. ^^0 But I can understand you just fine.

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anjin_no_sekai June 18 2008, 14:39:13 UTC
Yes. It's kinda sappy xP

Honestly, I didn't know exactly how to end it oO I thought it was to sudden also Oo

I'll check the punctuation, thanks ^^

And about these "..." ... Kinda love them!! xDDDDDDD

Thanks a lot for your useful comment ^w^

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aricchy June 21 2008, 22:51:27 UTC
TOMAPI 4 EVER!!
*___* you're just incredible! this fic is very cute *_* *in love mode* but...I hate ToMaki XD
Tomapi...is...fantastic! *W*
thank for wrote this fic <3

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anjin_no_sekai June 21 2008, 23:01:21 UTC
I'm glad you liked it!!

ToMaki xDDDDD Well... I must admit I like it :3

xDDDDD

Thanks for the comment

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starmuffin_news July 16 2008, 00:47:16 UTC
ahh! me encantó!
Oye, muy bien el inglés, un 7 (o 10, depende de donde vivas XD)

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anjin_no_sekai July 16 2008, 03:00:55 UTC
jajaja Gracias ^^

Q bueno que te gustó ^^

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