I Do, Do I?

[angiasaa]

This was written a long time ago, when I was waiting for an incredibly boring class on Human Resource Management to hurry up and finish happening....  I don't expect you to make any nice comments, but feel free to say what you like....  Just try to maintain some level of pertinence to the post ya?  :oP

Comments

[thekamajournals]

For the very first time I stand speechles. Such powerful emotions can only be brought forward by total submission to love. I hope the girl knows how lucky she is to have a man love her so much that pain brings about pleasure.

Simply awestruck!

[angiasaa]

Total submission to love....

That's such a beautiful way of putting your point across....

It's a wonder how our emotions can sometimes just come to the surface and show themselves for what they are....

A sparkle in the eye, a quivering smile, the gentle blink of an eyelid, the slow turning of a head to face you....

There are so many subtle ways of saying things.... without really saying them. :)

I hope she's lucky.... :) Sometimes, pain can hurt loved ones too....

[latelyontime]

I am never very sure whether I should be responding to the raw emtions of the poet or his skills. In cases of uncertainty, I just state the uncertainty and let it pass.

[angiasaa]

Either way is good. Both, is even better....

I love to justify my pomes.... I relish it with passion. Both ways, my poetic styles as well as the emotional contexts involved.

Note: I sometimes snap shut nice and tight at some emotional aspects of the pomes. But in general, I'm quite open about them. However, regarding the style, I'm always a willing participant in its disection. :)

the critieuq: part 1

[latelyontime]

I am one of those horrible people who actually take things at face value and am presuming now that you actually want feedback on style and the craft of poetry writing for this particular poem. I shall be, as I adorn my editorial cap, nasty…but it is not personal and it is brutal only towards the poem

Re: the critieuq: part 1

[angiasaa]

Point well noted. I had a couple of caustic remarks 'mailed' to me on my Colorblind pome

the critique: part 2

[latelyontime]

I shall now proceed to do a line by line analysis, looking at the major pitfalls that poems should avoid - clichés, clumsy words, forced syntax, anachronisms, telling images instead of showing images and uneconomic use of sound

Re: the critique: part 2

[angiasaa]

Hmmm.... Saw this comment last, but it's late and I need some sleep. I'll reply to this at a point in time in the future, as yet unknown.

[subtle_blues]

Live by that thought, and you'll see the beauty of living in a life filled with the pleasure of unending pain....
A bittersweet pain and an unalderated pleasure! Why blame the heart? It is, but a slave for love.

for years in progression, Love knows how to grow....(how apt and beautful:))
A vine, it entwines my heart
In time, the vine is all I see..
Love _knows_ how to grow...

[angiasaa]

Blame the heart, not the girl. I did'nt mean to imply that it's the heart that is at fault. I'm metaphorically refering to the owner of the heart. :)

Yes, Love knows how to grow....

[subtle_blues]

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