Prodigal Daugter Part 1 Catherine/Sofia

[angel1972]

I decided that it would be easier on everyone if I split the story in 2.

The opening paragraph was provided for me by

Comments

[racethewind10]

i really enjoy this pairing and you write them well. The detail and description is rich without killing the story, and the emotion is strong without being over the top. I enjoyed the way you describe Sofia now, and I like that you're using Catherine's past.

I did catch a couple of spelling errors, but only one is really worth mentioning.

And as if to belly her words the detective’s hands were already slowly
(Second to last sentence in whole fic)
"Belly" Should be "belie" ;p

My only other comment is perhaps occasionally use another phrase to describe Catherine than 'strawberry blonde' when you put Sofia as 'the blonde' in the same sentence, thats a lot of blonde! ;p

Looking forward to where this goes!

[angel1972]

Thank you for the kind words.

I'm always worried that I'm not adding enough descriptions or emotions, but at the same time I don't want to get bogged down. Then it comes across as an inventory list.

I think now that the holidays are almost over, I'll actually be able to concentrate on getting some writing done.