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andromeda3116

as the turn of the worlds, part twelve

Jun 01, 2011 14:48

Title: As the Turn of the Worlds; Book One: Objects in Space
Chapter Title: Into the Black
Author: andromeda3116/cupid-painted-blind
Rating: High T/Low M
Characters/Pairings: Ensemble; Mai/Jet, Zuko/Katara (est. relationship), Smellerbee/Longshot (est. relationship), Toph/Haru, Suki/Sokka
Summary: Aang never woke up from the iceberg, and the world went ( Read more... )

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Comments 4

somniumweb June 2 2011, 00:45:27 UTC

I wibbled at the end there. :<

Fresh as always, keep them coming. I don't mind the posting date changes.

feral_shrew June 2 2011, 03:48:26 UTC

Longshot and Bee... their little scene at the end hurts. Bee is completely Zoe, here, and there are so many shades of War Stories and the BDM and everything else that people are going to get all kinds of ideas about what comes next.

Major, major eww on Zhao and his "I am irresistable!" complex. Major ew, especially since he kept chasing after a Companion about the same age, and... yeah, he's one heck of a villain.

Aang is completely and totally adorable and should have someone designated to sit there and hug him all day.

seserakh June 2 2011, 04:46:28 UTC

Does it make me sick in the head that I want the Reavers to invade and get destroyed by team bender?

marybwolf June 2 2011, 07:09:21 UTC

Ooh, I think this is my favorite chapter yet! You've hit so many notes here, even though this is only a handful of the characters and storylines you're weaving. I like the little reminder of Zhao and Azula and all that going on, and the brilliance of Aang's idea (untrained benders, unite!) is brillant. ;o

Is that a modicum of respect for Jet I see thar in my heart? *le gasp* 'Tis, 'tis. Awesome work, there. And Katara's observations of the Jet/Mai relationship are wonderful, as well. Also the irony of Mai being the only one stable enough to dose out the morphine. /remembering

And Bee at the end. My heart, it breaks. I adore how you've captured the essences of both Bee and Longshot, and Zoe and Wash--the tearing of love for her men, and how, no matter how desperately he tries, the husband can't understand the wife's love for and duty to the captain and comrade, and how Bee understands the lack of reconciliation between them in his mind. Lovely, lovely work.

Also, best of studying with summer classes! :D