[Fic] though I am native here

[analineblue]

Title: though I am native here
Author: analineblue
Fandom: No. 6
Pairing/Characters: Nezumi/Shion
Warnings/Spoilers: no warnings; spoilers through the end of the anime
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: ~6000
Summary: Shion thinks maybe he’s always known what would happen if that wall actually came down.

Notes: So this is my take on a fix-it for the end of the

Comments

[zoesque]

I really liked this! :D

I love the way all the important things here don't ever really get explicit voice, from Shion's premonition that Nezumi is going to leave right up to Nezumi's sort-of confession.

This:

“You left because you needed to find something inside of yourself, right? I want to see that place.”

Is so perfect. I made a stupid noise reading it. <3 Also perfect? Shion as counsellor, omg.

In summary, I approve of your desire to fix the ending(s)! Thank you for sharing this. :)

[analineblue]

I'm so glad you liked it! ^_^

And especially that you liked that line, as that was something I struggled with, and sort of kept messing with right up until I posted?

I'm glad that the whole Shion as a counselor thing makes sense outside of my head, too. It just seemed to fit. ^_~

Anyway, thank you so much - I really appreciate the comment! ♥

[aaabb]

it's beautiful! really really beautiful. and i think it's the first time where i read on a fiction where Sion goes with Nezumi, and i think that this may be really the right way... cause Sion, after No.6 rebuilt (even if maybe it would took a lot of more time than just 3 years) would be free from the promisess he made with Safu and the doctor and Elyurias herself that made him promise to reconstruct the city in the way he thinks it's correct... so once free of this duty, he can go with Nezumi to see the world he has come to love after the rebirth that Nezumi brought to him. Sion it's a naturalist and loves life, loves to know the world, so it seems strange that No.6 ties him down... it's true, he has still his mum, but don't forget that 'a world without nezumi is meaningless' so he's still the most important thing he have. Oh my god, i wrote a second divinecomedy >

[analineblue]

Thanks so much! I really like the idea of Shion eventually leaving No. 6 and going with Nezumi, and so I'm glad that worked here. :)

And I completely agree, taking into account the novel's version of events, with Shion's promise and his responsibilities for playing a larger role in the rebuilding and all of that, I think it would definitely take longer than three years for him to be able to leave all of that behind with a clear conscience. But I do sort of see it as being how things would go for them ultimately. Partly because I really can't see Nezumi settling down in No. 6, and also because of what you said about Shion being really enthusiastic and open to new experiences... *nod*

Anyway, thanks so much for the comment. I'm really glad you enjoyed this. :)

[leasspell_dael]

That was beautiful. It was just the kind of closure I needed after the anime. I agree that Nezumi's exit in the anime was kinda abrupt, so I enjoyed that you stretched it out a bit here. Thanks so much for sharing this!

[analineblue]

Thanks so much for reading, and for the comment! ^_^

I'm so glad I'm not the only one who felt like Nezumi's leaving was really abrupt in the anime. ;) And I'm really glad you enjoyed this. <3

[extraordinary]

Ooh! ♥

This is definitely my favourite fanfic of yours so far! =) I think you've really gotten used to the characters now and it definitely shows? Every paragraph is so perfect and fitting and ungh~! I wish I could express myself better, b-but instead have a 100% flaily comment? *grin!*

PLUS, YOU MADE ME CRY. OK. I MIGHT NEVER FORGIVE YOU. x'D J/K J/K! B-but, I'd been watching Natsume Yuujinchou before reading this so my emotions were already all over the place and I just teared up even before Nezumi left and the tears didn't stop until halfway through... ALL THESE FEELINGS OH GOD.

[analineblue]

Aww, thanks so much! ♥ This fic was harder for me to write, probably since it's Shion's POV, and I hadn't done that yet, but I'm so glad to hear that it worked. I do feel like I'm getting used to the characters too, and so I'm really glad that shows!

*hugs and shares tissues!* I have so many feelings for this series, IDEK anymore! So I understand! <3 At least it had a happy ending though? 8D

[kaitou_marron]

When you told me you posted (and I knew I had free wi-fi in my hotel), I knew I wanted to set aside time to read this.

It's lovely and beautiful. <333 There are so many parts that were so emotionally touching... while others were humorous parts that I don't know if I can cover everything I liked!

"There had been so much of Nezumi in that space, as if the walls and the books had absorbed certain fragments of his warmth and his life." - I love this line. It really shows that kind of connection/need Shion has towards Nezumi. (I'm sure Nezumi has similar feelings, but... this isn't in his POV. =p)

I snickered at the fact that Nezumi didn't come through the window. It totally caught me off guard. XD;;

And their conversations were so real and comfortable. <333
You were able to capture them so well. (I know this is your first time writing Shion's POV, but I think you did a really good job, so I wanted to be sure to let you know.)

You did a really great job with this, and I hope you found the experience however frustrating to be

[analineblue]

I'm SO happy to hear that this worked. *_* Especially with Shion's POV and all of that.

I'm really glad the dialogue came through okay, too... For some reason that's what I was really struggling at with this, just... Trying to make the conversations believable given the situation, and that they're older and all of that? The first half of this fic came a LOT easier than the last half, for whatever reason. ;) But I'm so glad you liked it. ^_^

Thank you~! ♥

(P.S. ...How's Joplin? ^_~)