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amygirl

Out of Order: Crossroads (1/2)

Feb 04, 2007 22:00

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giselleslash February 5 2007, 04:34:10 UTC

Oh, you've managed just fine Amy...this is perfectly done. Its a great balance between Sean knowing what is right and actually being able to do it since his feelings are so muddled and you can really feel Orlando's admiration for Sean as well as his crush.

I was soooo happy to see this posted tonight, what a perfect way to end the night...Prince playing at halftime and an Amy Orlibean! Wheeee! :D

amygirl February 5 2007, 16:14:47 UTC

Thanks...I really wanted to make it clear that Orlando was crushing but not have it out loud enough that Sean would realize what was going on. At least not fully.

LOL...I didn't watch the Superbowl. Me and Football don't get along very well. Which when one lives in the Land of the Packer's can be a bit of a problem. :-P But I'm flattered you put an Orlibean from me up there with a Prince performance... *snerks*

Did you see the other Orlibean (well sort of OB) that I posted this weekend?

Gaaaahhhh....I'm soooo cold. Bleh.

liriel1810 February 5 2007, 07:13:19 UTC

Hmmm, Sean's really struggling isn't he? I think you've struck a very nice balance. It's not the least bit icky.

amygirl February 5 2007, 16:16:47 UTC

LOL...Sean hasn't even begun to struggle yet. He doesn't even have a clue the trouble he's in where Orlando is concerned.

Glad it wasn't icky...it was a tough go for a while and this part was originally supposed to be much, much different but it came across as way to skeevy.

foxrafer February 5 2007, 12:19:35 UTC

You definitely managed the right tone. I think you depicted Sean and the push and pull in his mind perfectly. If you take out Sean's thoughts and just look at their conversation, you could see it as two brothers so I think you did a great job.

amygirl February 5 2007, 16:18:18 UTC

Thanks, that's exactly the tone I was going for where on the surface the conversation would be normal but for the players involved there was much more subtext going on between the words. One of those things where what's not being said is almost more important than what actually is.

angiepen February 5 2007, 15:15:06 UTC

It worked fine, don't sweat it. :)

Angie

amygirl February 5 2007, 16:19:17 UTC

Glad to hear it because I honestly was worried that it would leave and bad taste in people's mouths. Thanks for the feedback!

jackieville February 5 2007, 15:32:50 UTC

You struck a perfect balance! Really, really enjoyed Sean and Orlando's conversation! *waits patiently for more*

amygirl February 5 2007, 16:20:43 UTC

Thanks, glad the conversation worked as well as the balance since that balance, and the loss of it, is pretty much intregal to the entire series arch.

More will hopefully not be too far off. But I have a bunch of other stuff I need to work on first.