Comments | amonitrate: fic: Sentinel XII

amonitrate

fic: Sentinel XII - Iron Man

May 17, 2009 23:29

Been a long time, but hopefully this chapter is worth it. I'm reasonably certain the next chapter will be the last, but sometimes things get longer as I write, so no guarantee. I thought it was only going to be ten chapters, at one point.

Not quite a year ago I posted the first bit of this story, thinking it was a one-off vignette. 50,000+ words ( Read more... )

sentinel, fic:iron_man

Comments 22

destro May 19 2009, 02:17:09 UTC

God. God. I love the switch in this, Pepper finishing off a bottle of wine without noticing it; Tony finally, finally not just aware of his impact on the world, but on the people around him.

And just, okay, the way they interact in this, how aware of the vulnerabilities and blind spots when it comes to each other:

but he was rambling now, his words sliding together with that earnestness that never failed to knock her off her stride.

It's just so organic, and subtle and true. Gah.

amonitrate May 19 2009, 02:22:18 UTC

ohhhh thank you. and thank you again for saving my ass with the car thing. I'm so happy it works. I was kind of paranoid about them actually communicating for once, afraid it would come off heavy handed or too obvious. yay.

anonymous May 20 2009, 03:27:46 UTC

Very, very lovely. Still on the edge of my seat for them, I have been loving this ever since Tony and his screwdriver and the piano, way back at the beginning.

- Chief

amonitrate May 21 2009, 01:23:52 UTC

Thanks!

agilebrit May 21 2009, 00:57:41 UTC

GAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH, I love you for this.

"I'm pretty sure, comparatively speaking, that your side of the cosmic balance sheet is paid in full."

Oh, TONY.

amonitrate May 21 2009, 01:23:38 UTC

thanks! I kind of loved that line. I'm happy it worked for you.

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amonitrate May 21 2009, 01:20:49 UTC

thanks! I'm very happy you liked it.

foxestacado August 27 2009, 07:08:12 UTC

This is SO meaty, so authentic, and so goddamned GOOD.

What I love most is the very well-played, well-thought out game theory in this whole thing. The behind-the-scenes business politics. SHIELD. Reporters. The whole works.

And your voices for all of the characters: AMAZING. I can't get over how authentic and compelling this whole thing is. I need to reread this and start asking you questions about motivations, what's going on inside their heads, etc. God. I told myself I wasn't going to read this until after I take my exams, but hell, once I gave myself a little taste of this, I couldn't stop.

amonitrate August 29 2009, 15:32:10 UTC

Wow, thanks! I really appreciate the feedback.