Comments | amles80: Invisible Breathing

amles80

Invisible Breathing

Oct 27, 2011 21:45

Title: Invisible Breathing
Fandom: Heroes
Rating/Genre: PG-13/slash
Characters/Pairing: Noah Bennet/Claude Rains
Summary: This sort of follows the “Five times… and one time…” pattern. When Noah is with Claude, he learns to hold his breath.
Word count: 500
Spoilers/Warnings: This is pretty vague…
Notes: For heroes_contest Drabble Challenge 31, “Breath”.

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genre: slash, rating: pg-13, !fanfic, character: noah bennet, pairing: noah/claude, *fandom: heroes

Comments 5

quirkysmuse November 20 2011, 05:15:01 UTC

Wow, a very striking piece here. I love the progression of their relationship in snippets. Well done.

amles80 November 20 2011, 11:19:36 UTC

Thank you! I am very glad you like it.

dancingdragon3 November 23 2011, 05:10:54 UTC

He tried to not even breathe when one hand clasped the sheets and the other finished what the dream had started.

Woah. That was just...woah. Hot and forbidden.

This started in a great place and just kept getting better. The ending was so emotional and beautifully written.

amles80 November 23 2011, 11:28:02 UTC

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. :D It was a real challenge this time, to edit it until I had no more than 500 words, I'm glad I managed to keep it "hot" and "emotional" as intended. :)

game_byrd November 26 2011, 14:53:54 UTC

Wow, you managed to say a lot in so little! Great job. I love the idea of Claude teasing and touching Noah, being the one to condition Noah into not over-reacting to "weird" stuff going on around him, but just going with it. That would explain a lot about how he was in the show!