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amerasu1013

Fic: What we see

Dec 21, 2010 20:23

And the third and last fic I wrote for grammar_glamour 's prompt in the Santa Exchange at ontd_pinto ...
Post with explanation and stuff and rambling is here.

What we see
Summary: And now the voices get louder, one high-pitched and scared, the other… the other voice is laughing. We get closer to the house, to the voices, to the two men inside. One is begging now, saying “ ( Read more... )

pairing: chris/zach, huh, ze german is unable to write fluff, fic, fandom: rps (star trek reboot), pinto santa, wtf, omg, dark fic

Comments 12

jachelle0627 December 22 2010, 04:46:50 UTC

Okay. I've managed to avoid anything vampire related for the last several years, but for you bb I will read. Um, if this is what you write for Christmas, does that mean you write about unicorns and fluffy bunnies for Halloween? Just kidding. Chris and Zach as vampires, I can definitely go for that. I really liked the voyeuristic POV and going back and forth in the time line really added to the suspense of the story. Very good stuff as always.

amerasu1013 December 23 2010, 20:18:10 UTC

Haha, it's not REALLY a vampire story, is it? So it doesn't count and you can go on as "Vampire-free since 93"... (I'm watching HIMYM right now, sorry lol)
Halloween? I didn't write anything this year, well, nothing Halloween-related. We'll see about next year, but unless I learn how to write fluff in the next 10 months, probably no unicorns and fluffy bunnies. ... or some that eat human flesh or something. Hm. ;-P
And thank you very much!!! I'm very happy you er, enjoyed this story, especially with the POV and the time line jumps, I was a bit nnervous about that. Thank you!!!
(and thanks for all your lovely comments, too!! Made my day!)
<3<3<3<3

inu_spockya December 23 2010, 07:16:42 UTC

I like what you write for christmas. This is chilling and so believable... The POV is different too, but it works very nicely here.

Brrr!! I approve!

amerasu1013 December 23 2010, 20:19:27 UTC

Haha, I liked writing it! Well, more or less... I didn't like that I couldn't write fluff, no matter how hard I tried, haha.
And yay, a "Brrr" again lol! Thank you very much, I'm so glad you liked it!!!

zjofierose December 26 2010, 08:52:52 UTC

um, WOW. this was really good, bb.

i love the set-up; both the flashbacks, and the first person narration. really really interesting. and dammit, no one does sinister like you do, it's got to be said!

fascinating!

<3

amerasu1013 December 30 2010, 18:28:55 UTC

Teehee, thank you very much!!!
... is it weird that I kinda love that people like my sinister writing? Maybe it is... I should really try my hand at fluff soon, haha!
But I'm really happy you liked the style with the flashbacks and the first person POV, I was kinda nervous about that. Thank you again!!! *squeezes*

medea_fic January 4 2011, 01:10:06 UTC

D: But but but - JOE! And poor Zach! And poor Chris!! D:

This was fantastic, bb! But - disturbing. I seem to be saying that a lot about your last few fics! <3

amerasu1013 January 11 2011, 17:13:59 UTC

Haha, originally I started with this: "hey, I should write a Vampire AU where at the end one of the boys' sibling visits and Zach/Chris says 'how delicious of him to stop by'". And then... this happened. I have no idea how, it just kinda grew. Disturbing, yeah, my mind disturbs me sometimes lol.
But I did have a fluffy plot bunny a couple of days ago, I only have to write it. Hm. I only have to write it... ;-P
Thank you very much and I'm so glad you liked it!!!

inu_spockya January 9 2011, 08:02:51 UTC

o holy crap!!

like the way yer mind works, actually. brrrr!!! me I don't like the holidays one bit, and so such a story as this, mmm.

tasty.
sad -- but very tasty, aye...

amerasu1013 January 11 2011, 17:14:42 UTC

Sad, but tasty - two good words for this story haha! I think they fit... Thank you very much and I'm so glad you liked it!