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alydhe

A Beautiful Gift Ch 1 - Escape of the Gyrfalcons

Jan 16, 2010 09:42

Okay, here is Chapter One of A Beautiful Gift, my healer!Simon/Mal fic. Notes explaining...well...basically explaining River are at the bottom. Feel free to give concrit or to point out any spelling or grammar mistakes. I poured over this thing looking for them but as I worked on it all night and it's now 9am, I probably missed something ( Read more... )

simon, a beautiful gift, my fics, river, mal, mal/simon, firefly

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pinbot72 January 16 2010, 18:45:54 UTC

So great to see this back! And this chapter was angsty and exciting, all in one go. Can't wait for more.

alydhe January 16 2010, 19:25:35 UTC

Thanks, glad to be back. Hopefully I can get a another chapter out soon without another year going bye. lol.

I thought about breaking this up into two chapters, but after the long wait and how short the individual parts were you guys would probably kill me so... yay!long chapter?

I hope I did okay on the action, I haven't written too many action scenes and it probably shows.

sinewa January 16 2010, 20:13:07 UTC

wow, great to see this again! the action and pacing are good, and the lengths which Simon will go to for River, well. we already knew he'd do anything, break any law or moral for her, but from the first words it's such a clear demonstration of his love for River.

i can only imagine what Simon's determination and adrenalin are hiding and what will happen when they really are on their own, dealing with all that's happened to them. something tells me it's going to be a bumpy ride, not just emotionally, but coupled with a certain king's penchant for trouble and adventure...

look forward to seeing more and thank again for the update!

alydhe January 16 2010, 20:47:43 UTC

I am so glad to be writing it! Thanks for the compliments, I was really worried I was rushing it or that the action would just fizzle pathetically.

Simon's love and loyalty of River knows no bounds, and that's really what makes me love him so much. It's someone really special that can love that deeply. To use his gift to harm goes against his very nature but he does it anyway for her. And his virginity and soul? Acceptable sacrifices in his mind if it keeps her safe.

And yeah, Simon's on his way to a major breakdown that he's going to be struggling to prevent. Mal, at first, isn't going to be much help. Right now Mal doesn't see Simon and River as part of his rag tag family and anything outside of it is a threat to be battled so that's just going to be another burden on poor Simon. Mal's penchant for hijinks and bad plans won't help either. lol.

I've still got the writing bug so I'm planning to sit down after dinner, tonight, and start on the next chapter. Wish me luck!

sinewa January 16 2010, 21:12:00 UTC

Luck! :)

fairyeyez27 January 17 2010, 09:33:03 UTC

Hey- FairyEyez here from Y!gallery- thanks for the link :) Im really intrigued by this and looking forward to more- do you have a link to a fic listing of all ur stuff?

alydhe January 17 2010, 17:41:10 UTC

Welcome and thank you for both the compliment and the wonderful idea! I don't know why I never made a masterlist of my fics, before. It took a while to hunt some of them down, but here is the link to the list. Feel free to leave ConCrit on any and everything you want.

Keep in mind, though, that so far this is the only Firefly story I have. The others are from varying fandoms.

The Fanfic Masterlist