Lensherr M.D. Introducing a Stranger (3)

[alxote]

 The lights had been turned low on the ward, the hum down to the static call of the monitors and the computer a young nurse was tapping, her face tight like drying paint. Erik rolled his sleeves and scrubbed his hand with a pulse of anti-bacterial wash, cleaning to the line of his elbow. Hygiene had always been rigorously observed in the field;

Comments

[scribble_myname]

I like this-except that it ends so abruptly. And it's a huge difference between the two of them. Beautifully drawn.

[alxote]

Yeah, I know what you mean, think I might take it down. Thanks so much for the input.

[scribble_myname]

You could just add a couple of sentences. :hopeful puppy dog eyes:

[alxote]

This is such a wonderful review I just wanted to redirect you to a note in my journal about why I won't be continuing but thank you so much for the thoughts and construction.

[shiftyinprogrss]

Followed this from 1stclass_kink and am loving the relationship dynamics so far. I'm really glad isn't not an exact copy of House, which would be boring, but very much what *these* characters would do in a similar senario.

Regarding how the scene ends, I agree that it could use a little more. Just something to wrap it up a bit. Do they sit down in companionable silence to await the results? Do they sit and think about all the things they want to know about each other but don't know how to bring up? Does Charles stay and Erik go do his own waiting ritual? Where does it go from there?

Looking forward to more!

[shiftyinprogrss]

And I now see someone else came up with much better ideas for closing the scene, so, you know, just ignore me.

[vamphime]

Don't mind me, I'm simply waiting on the edge of my seat for an update.

[rethzneworld]

urgh lensherr what's with you? D: anyhow, charles is adorable as ever~