New SGA Fic: Vapor Lock, [complete]

[allusory_tea]

A happy birthday fic for murron, who has kindly said to unlock it and let everyone else see.

Comments

[ratcreature]

I enjoyed this, especially the first scene on the beach, the descriptions were very evocative.

[auburnnothenna]

Some stories are really easy to write for some reason. This was one of them. The scene on the beach was virtually written in chat, with only the near drowning left to be expanded on.

We had to be sneaky, though, and not let murron know we were working on it.

[mecurtin]

Awww, vulnerable!John. We don't get to see that enough.

nit:
hut du noir
hut du soir

[auburnnothenna]

Why? Why? Why do the typos come back to haunt me? It's soir now, thank you.

And you don't think the fandom has enough vulnerable John. Just keep hanging around our journals. I never get enough of it either.

[mecurtin]

It's really hard to meld GuntotingKiller!John with Dork!John, 'tis true. And in canon John tends not to look vulnerable if there's anyone else there to see.

[rae_fa]

Aw...i do like this! I think my most favourite thing about fics are the kisses. I'm a sucker for well-written, detailed kisses. And that one on the beach? Fabulous ♥.

Rae

[auburnnothenna]

*laughs*

Thank you.

The outline read: And they kiss and kiss and kiss. Fade to black.

Sometimes a good kiss is more romantic and hot than a graphically described sex scene.

[lillian78]

Word to that. A glorious kiss, completely hearfelt, will melt my heart. I don't have to read NC-17 detailing to have emotional closure. Don't get me wrong, a beautifully hot sex scene is wonderful, but nothing without the emotional engagement between the lovers.

[sageness]

gorgeously done. The language is beautiful and your descriptive detail is phenomenal.

*loves*

[auburnnothenna]

Thank you from both of us. eretria likes to get in their heads. I have a great fondness for describing where they are. It just seemed nice to write a story where the natives weren't loony or hostile and the Tish world sprang up pretty much full blown when we began outlining this on chat.

[farwing]

Really lovely and scary and sexy.

[auburnnothenna]

Aw, thanks. I guess the scary would be John's near drowning.

[farwing]

Yeah. I figured you *probably* wouldn't kill him in this story. ;)

[auburnnothenna]

Despite my reputation, I've only ever killed John and Rodney in one set of stories, and those were natural deaths at the end of their lives. I don't think eretria has killed them at all.

On the other hand, I've killed all of the other characters at least once or twice....