Office fic: pressed against a sea of stars

[allibabab]

Title: pressed against a sea of stars
Author: allibabab
Rating: T
Wordcount: 3,257
Spoilers: This hasn't and won't happen, but it takes place after Cocktails.
Summary: In the end, it is never, never giving up.
A/N: This was a doozy to get out! Thanks so much to biggerdorkthanu and fireworkfiasco for all their help.

Comments

[fiorie]

I am utterly amazed by you. You do know that, right?

Oh, I just love everything about this story and this is exactly how I want things to happen.

This whole exchange of dialogue:

“No,” she says quietly, her voice tight. “I told him I kissed you.”

There is a flash of something in his eyes, a bright glare, like sunlight off a rushing wave, and she feels a warmth pass over her neck, spreading down to her belly, across her hips.

“You did,” he says.

“I--I told him I did. I mean--” She hangs her head and presses her lips shut, biting back nervousness and insecurity and the hope that threatens just beneath the surface. “Yeah,” she says. “I did kiss you.”

He smiles a little as he says, “I know.” Her lips curve in response, and it almost hurts the way sugar does, so sweet it burns.

There's just something so JimandPam about it that I just can't even handle it. What I like best about this piece is that it's not the "Monday after Cocktails" story. There's been time for things to be said, and they haven't been, so Pam's built up this

[allibabab]

Replying to comments like this is so hard because I appreciate all the thought and time you put into writing it, and I want my reply to reflect that appreciation, but I can't even think when you leave me comments like this because all I can think is I LOVE THIS WOMAN. Or... something. :)

No, really. This is review is beyond wonderful. You are beyond wonderful. Hearing from you that this was Jim-and-Pam-ish is such an enormous compliment because you obviously have such a hold on their characterizations that I just... I make no sense! You know what I mean.

Basically, you are the love of my life. Thank you so much! ♥

[greenfish]

Oh my God, all I can say is that you honestly picked out my favorite exchange in the story as well. I mean, honestly, that scene was so, so -- them.

And I agree; how Pam's been holding that in for a month, thinking about it every day, waiting for the ball to drop, and then she just finally says it. I know how that is, how it is to be like that and you made that work so well, wow.

When it comes to dialogue I often have to read it aloud to hear the voices and it's often the easiest way to tell if someone "has" it, and you had it.

Of course, all of your writing has a lovely lyricism to it that I just envy to the ends of the earth.

I also really loved this line: She doesn’t think about Jim again that morning, except for when she makes tea, and takes a shower, and brushes her teeth, and chooses her outfit. He’s not in her head as she presses her toes down on the accelerator or feels the grooves of her steering wheel slide against her fingers, except that he is, because he always is.

God, yes.

[allibabab]

Hey, thank you so much! Hearing that the dialogue sounds like them is such a huge compliment, so I really appreciate that so much, as well as your calling my writing lyrical. Yay! This is such a fabulous comment. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! ♥

[judexseven]

but it’s all nothing, it becomes nothing, in the way his lips press her back against the vending machine. She feels him brace himself, one hand on either side, brushing down the brightly lit buttons, a heated handprint on the glass, and his warm, solid body pressed everywhere against hers. His lips are wet and soft and more than she thinks she can bear; there is nothing and everything in the way they move against each other. They fit like a tree’s roots in the soil, like clouds in the sky, like the earth in the solar system in the galaxy in the universe and she feels a hot wash of tears trickle over her cheekbones, running into the spaces between their lips, salty and real, this is real--

Oh, my God. That's all I can say.

[allibabab]

Ha! Those are some of my favorite lines too (if it's not too presumptuous of me to have favorites from my own work). Thank you so much for your comment! I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the story. :)

[pennylane83]

I followed miss bennie's rec, and oh please tell me I'm not too late to tell you how much I absofreakingLOVED this? Because I really did. It's just so gorgeous and the entire time they're standing in front of the vending machines I think I was literally holding my breath. So I think if a fic can make you almost pass out from anticipation, it's THAT good. Just, wonderful wonderful job :)

[pennylane83]

Um, that was supposed to be miss_bennie's rec :P

[allibabab]

You are never too late! Thank you so much! ♥

[danamulder]

I can't even begin to tell you how incredibly beautiful this is. You have stunning prose, and it conjures every emotion, every action of the characters. I can't even go through my favorite parts, because it's pretty much the whole thing. :)

I loved it. It will definitely be going into the memories for re-reading. Awesome, amazing work.

[allibabab]

Aw, thank you so much! I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the story. :)

[feministyogini]

This was so great. As always, I love your use of evocative imagery and metaphors to communicate the feelings between them.

[allibabab]

Thank you! I appreciate that so much.