Desmond's Impulse - Chapter 3

[alien_writings]

This is the third chapter in what is tentatively titled Desmond's Impulse. I retconned the events of Chapter 1 somewhat, too. I hope you enjoy! The previous chapters are below.
1 | 2Annika grumbled as she stared at the unfinished paper taunting her from her computer screen. The little cursor blinked on and off, mocking her inability to come up with

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[theun4givables]

I have a feeling that Annika is going to tell Desmond's parents, anyway. Or that at the very least, Everett and Desmond are going to have no chance against Annika and her team.

Desmond seems entirely fucked right now. Oops.

[alien_writings]

Desmond's team may have a better chance than you might think, but he is still (probably) fucked.

Speaking of fucked, I seriously hope Desmond isn't going to do what I think he might do in the next scene or so. D:

[pixiebelle]

One little typo...

“What,” Annika said.

Should have a question mark after "What" I think.

This was written really well. The detail and all that at he very beginning set the scene nicely, and it was done well. I wanted to like Annika, but then the whole challenge thing was just mean. I see some good in her though, so I have hope she does the right thing!

[alien_writings]

I'm glad you thought it was done well. I guess we'll have to wait and see what Annika actually ends up doing. I have a bad feeling Desmond's not-so-little secret will come out, one way or the other.