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I Prefer the Mind Control Rewrite - Chapter 15

Jan 17, 2013 09:28

This is Chapter 15 of I Prefer the Mind Control. Feedback would be nifty, but I know that might be difficult as this is already on Chapter 15, haha.

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I was grateful Preston wasn’t in the room when my phone rang, because it was Xan on the other end.

( 'Hey, Xan? Uh, what's up?' I said, trying to keep my voice from getting overexcited. )

pairing: xan/dylan, character: xan, character: preston, character: dylan, writerverse, series: i prefer the mind control, pov: dylan

Comments 2

theun4givables January 17 2013, 21:59:41 UTC

Dylan.

DYLAN. WHY WOULD YOU INVITE YOUR MAYBE-BOYFRIEND OVER TO YOUR DORM WHEN YOU LIVE WITH YOUR EX. That's just asking for fucking trouble. And well, trouble's what you got, dude.

And Preston. Preston, bbbbbbb. You definitely drank a little too fucking much. I just want to hug him and kick Dylan in the shins. Xan, too.

n3m3sis43 January 18 2013, 18:47:51 UTC

Oh, right. I remember THIS chapter. It's the one that caused me to say "Dylan, I am disliking you more and more in this rewrite" and then accuse him of being Kalen-y. Well, I stand by that statement upon rereading it now. Especially looking at the previous chapter, where Preston says he needs some space. I had not read that when I made my comments comparing Dylan and Kalen. Well, now I have.

Dylan, dude. I get you are having a really rough time of it right now. And I understand you clearly have some very deep-seated issues. But Preston just realized he's in love with you, and then you dumped him for someone else like ten seconds later. Do you think you could extract your head from your behind long enough to at least not shove his face in your new relationship?

Oh, well. At least he doesn't remind me of Devin anymore?