NaNowrimo 2011 Extract 1 (Daedalus, Icarus and Ariadne)

[alicia_h]

Daedalus, father of Icarus, presented his son with his greatest invention: a set of wings constructed painstakingly from the fallen feathers of the birds in the skies over Crete by day and sealed to the wood and copper frame with the wax of the candles that lit the workshop by night. Daedalus gave his son freedom in the form of flight. His breath

Comments

[wytchcroft]

aiiiiiiiiei!! what a place to leave it!
jinkies - i didn't think such a powerful & tragic tale could be made any more so but the interconnection between Daedalus, Icarus and Ariadne, well that was very fresh and cleverly done. :))

interesting too to hear you in sort of narrator mode - quite a change there.

and now i want more!' :))

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nitpicker alert:
you probably know these already but i caught two typos:
'amour' for armour? 'as set of' for 'a set of'

[alicia_h]

Thank you for reading it. I'm glad you like my spin on it with all the interconnectedness. I've got some more of the Greek stuff to share but I think that might be a bit more rough around the edges.

And I'm sorry I had to leave it there! At some point I will be able to tell the falls of both Icarus and my flyer. :-)

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re nitpick:
the hard thing about nano is being strong and not going back to edit and fiddle with the writing during November, so typos will be missed by the best of us - and those who are a little dyslexic and very blind such as myself! :-P

[wytchcroft]

it was a pleasure:))

and i await the histories of Icarus and your flyer with anticipation - tragic as their fates may be!

and i too am a dyslexic blindy so i share that pain an will nitpick no more (ack - the editing and correcting of my stuff is by far the biggest drag about writing).