Un/Requited

[alicedawkins]

He finds himself noticing things. Things about Peter. And not the obvious things anyone would notice about Peter, because Peter is noticeable, he's this force of nature that draws looks everywhere he goes. Other things. For instance, not his big brown eyes that manage to retain a glimpse of innocence even when every other part of his body screams

Comments

[heartsunshine12]

To further elaborate, I loved this! I love how you can convey so much through just little moments and scenes. I really loved the kissing paragraph, I was like aw that's adorable but also aw that's slightly sad all at once, basically perfect. i am such a sucker for angst, i love it! (also sorry for sucking so bad at responding to emails). x

[alicedawkins]

Oh, thanx! My style of fic is always this jumping-trough-moments thing, I'm glad it works for you

[alicedawkins]

Oh, and a friend of mine thinks I was trying some play on words with the ''places he wishes he had never gone to'', which is SO not what I was doing and I think it kinda ruins the strenght of that paragraph if ppl think that's what I'm trying to do. Do you think I should change it?

[heartsunshine12]

OMG I know right?? This fandom makes you angsty I swear. I love happy endings and fluff but I'm pretty much unable to write it. Every time I try fluff it goes all angsty (but usually has a happy ending) unless I just write straight up porn.

Yeah I do really like your style.

I definitely think your intentions for the story worked. I liked the different approach you took (different as compared to most stuff in this fandom) and I found it to be just as believable. I liked how you explored this idea from our earlier discussions and I like how it turned out!

See, I didn't see it as a word play at all, but just as a pretty way of saying that there's things he wishes he didn't know. If it bothers you, change it, but I don't think you need to, I think it flows well as it stands currently.

[manics_and_me]

Oh my Lordy, so so beautiful. I love your style so very much. The "they are probably in love line" killed me quite a lot. Glorious x

[alicedawkins]

Oh, thank you! I take pride in that line. I don't know what my ''style'' is (jumping trough scenes, I guess?) but I'm glad you liked it.

[0_clay_0]

I love this for so many reasons, I can't even...

*speechless*

[alicedawkins]

Huh....I'm sure you never actually ARE speechless, not smn with your way with words. But you don't know how much it means to me that you loved it, I mean Coming Clean mesmerizes me and YOU liking smth I wrote...I...okay, now I'M speechless.

[vegalyra6]

Wow, I really love your way of writing, and I really love this...how just each of the brief glimpses into their lives gives such a full story. And I really love the ending :') Thanks for posting xx