Comments | alexhuntley: He’s never even given Mark that much, he thinks. Mark doesn’t get a song.

alexhuntley

He’s never even given Mark that much, he thinks. Mark doesn’t get a song.

Dec 15, 2005 20:47

The Truth
PG-13
Mark Cohen/Roger Davis
It’s pretty stream of conscious and it needs some work but let me know what you guys think, yeah?

( You're taking one down. You sing a sad song just to turn it around. You say you don't know. You tell me don't lie. You work at a smile and you go for a ride. You had a bad day. The camera don't lie. You're coming back down and you really don't mind... )

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misswritten December 16 2005, 02:35:16 UTC

Wow that was such an amazing story. I loved it. Just WOW that was so amazing. Awesome job.

alexhuntley December 18 2005, 05:54:22 UTC

Thank youuu!

maki_to13 December 16 2005, 02:49:49 UTC

Very nice and a refreshing theory on the cause of April's death.

alexhuntley December 18 2005, 05:54:48 UTC

There are so many possibilities there. I'm surprised it hasn't been explored more. Thanks!

rabidfangirlism December 16 2005, 02:54:25 UTC

VERY cool. Stream-of-consciousness rocks.

alexhuntley December 18 2005, 05:55:05 UTC

I like to dabble every now and then. Nice icon!

vixen_notatramp December 16 2005, 04:20:19 UTC

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wow. give me a second, and then i can give you coherent feedback.
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okay, i'm good now. i really like how you handled this fic. i think it could have turned out somewhat self-indulgent on you as a writer's part, as so many stream of conciousness fic do, but it most certainly didn't.
you handled roger's grief and anger perfectly. i was really impressed by the whole fic, but i think the line that really got me was:

Maybe Mark will understand that Roger led April like a sacrifice to the alter so that Mark could live to dance on tables and make films about people who don’t deserve films made about them.

the whole fic was absolutely wonderful, but that line just jumped out at me and wrapped around my brain.
this fic was beautiful and lyrical and everything that a stream of conciousness should be.
three cheers and hats of to you- brilliant fic all around.

s

alexhuntley December 18 2005, 05:56:15 UTC

Thank you for the great feedback! I almost scare myself with how I write Roger because I'm such a Mark girl but lately Roger's been living in my head. Especially Roger being nostalgic about April. Weird. (Fuckin' weird.)

siryn99 December 16 2005, 14:09:27 UTC

That was amazing. This is a scenario I've been thinking about for awhile and I think you did a great job putting it all together without letting it become too maudlin. You really did Roger justice. Great job. :)

alexhuntley December 18 2005, 05:56:41 UTC

This scenario needs more exploration! And thanks! I'm so glad Roger came across well.