Comments | alexhuntley: “You can’t afford an accident, Mark.”

alexhuntley

“You can’t afford an accident, Mark.”

Dec 04, 2005 19:35

Careful
Pairing: Mark Cohen/Roger Davis
Notes: New fandom. :[

( you know youre stunning, absolutely stunning and I'm running always running and now I'm crying, you know, only cause I'm caring and if you were more daring maybe you'd stop staring... )

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gildedmuse December 5 2005, 01:27:35 UTC

Very cute litle slice of life type story. I love the ending, and not just because of the implied sex. I like that Roget feels sick even just thinking about hurting Mark like that, even during what they're doing.

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 03:47:55 UTC

Exactly, yeah. He'd rather jump off a bridge than even consider hurting Mark/putting Mark at risk.

formerlydf December 5 2005, 01:37:55 UTC

Oh, wow. This was absolutely amazing. And, even though this is your first foray into this fandom, I really don't think you have anything to worry about. You got the characterisations spot on, and the dialogue was great and the writing was great and all the other stuff was great and everything was great and yeah.

See? It was so good it made me babble. *grins*

The "beautiful satire" and the "hot and cold kiss" was perfect, and all the little things like the banter, and Dr. Collins and the rainbow band-aid were just icing on the cake. Absolutely magnificent. I couldn't have asked for a better story. *smiles*

~DF

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 03:49:36 UTC

I was worried about characterization. Even though I love Mark and have probably studied him from every angle - I still worried about writing him. I'm glad you thought it was on! :)

Thanks. I like little details. They are my specialty.

formerlydf December 6 2005, 03:24:29 UTC

Ah, Mark, Mark, Mark. The nice thing about Mark is that there are so many different ways he can be interpreted. Yours was very realistic. And good. And stuff.

Oh god, again the ability to formulate coherent thoughts has left me. *laughs*

Tis a good specialty. I heartily approve. Here's hoping we get much more like this. *looks at you hopefully*

~DF

dancinguniverse December 6 2005, 02:20:26 UTC

you know, just because someone mentioned my icon just now... we match! Howdy, friend! Also, don't I know you from oceanfic?

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xcarex December 5 2005, 03:53:18 UTC

See, I love this, because it's frustratingly rare that ficcers ever consider the risks, and put that into their story. Welcoommme!

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 04:00:22 UTC

That was my goal. It's a pretty big part of their relationship. Even in the play/movie, Roger only starts to warm up to being with Mimi once he realizes shes HIV+ too and he isn't putting her at risk.

Thaaaaanks!

xcarex December 5 2005, 04:11:08 UTC

Also, PS: Beatleicons rock!

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 04:58:36 UTC

Hahaha, I just laughed so hard at yours.

kelbelle December 5 2005, 05:41:45 UTC

Wow, this was great.

To Mark, the words sound like beautiful satire and he wants to laugh until he cries. He takes the half he likes and runs with it, pulling Roger by the back of his head and his fingers in his hair into another hot and cold kiss,

Guh, I fucking love this.

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 15:45:06 UTC

Thanks! I was smiling as I wrote it.

flyakate December 5 2005, 05:42:39 UTC

I really like the fact that this is both very good Roger/Mark characterization and (like others have said) very cognizant of the fact that there is always danger in their relationship. Too many stories try to ignore that part of it: it's all "okay" when they're together, which isn't true.

Well done!

alexhuntley December 5 2005, 15:46:08 UTC

Thats my biggest hang up! I like to zero in on the tragedy of the relationship and pick at it so everythings far from "okay."

Thanks!!