If the sun dies,

[alectrona19]

Title: If the sun dies,
Pairing: Mino/Seunghoon
Length: 1,044 words
Rating: G
Summary: The sun dies so I only have eight minutes and thirty seconds left.
Note: As you read, you might find that the story is not obviously Minhoon or even qualifies to be called a fan fiction. But when I wrote this I had Minhoon pictured in mind, hence the

Comments

[lilylilym]

You're such a good writer. I like this a lot, reminds me of those, I don't know, poetic povs that tell many stories at once, fast forwards and backwards, summarizing a relationship without dwelling in too many details. It has this similar style to "25 lives," and it's hard to write. I forget how to write short one shot, nowadays my fics tend to be draggy and it sucks. Haha.

I guess I like the flow and the way you style your languages. It's heartbreaking, that part, "somewhere in Seoul you can't fall asleep all by yourself." I personally testify to that feeling post-breakup. But then again, I'm the one who can't sleep, and who knows if they think about it.

Great piece.

IT'S ME.

[30tells]

my IP got blocked cause I kept entering the wrong password. fail lol

OMG. I LOVE IT. It got better and better the more the fic progressed. There was tension and feeling build up. It's really a nice attempt at a "from the outside looking in" perspective from Mino. It feels like we know Seunghoon, but also are equipped with Mino's uncertainties. The imagery was really strong by the end scene! :)

I have several favorite lines, but this stood out for me was "At times I wanted to strip you down - in the purest way, and prepare for you a warm water bath to wash your worries away as they have always been baseless." I LOVE IT SO MUCH.

You captured the feeling of still caring about somebody after a break up really well. I especially liked the emphasis of isolating two people in their own state/places while it feels as if the rest of the world still carries on. Great piece ;)