Comments | alecto_chan: Life Eternal: Chapter 11

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Life Eternal: Chapter 11 - Blood of My Blood

Aug 24, 2005 12:24

Title: Life Eternal
Author: alecto_chan
Beta'ed by: amandasaitou
Rating: R
Summary: Severus Snape is placed on a mandatory leave of absence by Headmaster Dumbledore. No, not for the hol one would think he desperately needs but to help his family renovate and refurbish the Snapes' ancestral home he had abandoned some twenty years ago in North Yorkshire. At the very ( Read more... )

hp, fanfic, life_eternal

Comments 13

unbroken_halo August 24 2005, 17:40:05 UTC

Excellent chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed it. Why were you not happy with the chapter? It explained somethings and gave us new ones to ponder.

alecto_chan August 26 2005, 15:40:55 UTC

I suppose it's just my perfectionist streak. I usually spend about edit through a chapter twice before posting, but I rushed this one because I was going back to school. I'm glad you enjoyed it though. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

anmkosk August 24 2005, 18:00:15 UTC

Excellent chapter! And being early and of appropriate length (there is no such thing than a chapter too long) were nice, too... Aargh, I can't wait to read the rest of the story! Your way of writing is so catching that I actually fell that hunger myself, only I long for more juicy chapters instead of planning homicide ;)

alecto_chan August 26 2005, 15:41:50 UTC

Lol. I'm sure there's plenty of good writing out there to help satiate that hunger. ;) Thanks for commenting!

indigocat August 24 2005, 18:59:05 UTC

Loved those kisses the two had.

alecto_chan August 26 2005, 15:41:59 UTC

Thanks!

_inzilbeth_ August 25 2005, 02:21:23 UTC

I concur! Another excellent chapter. I am not sure either why you are not pleased. I think it was very good, very dramatic and of course those kisses, Mmmm.

I appreciated the explanations provided and am amazed at the detail and depth of the plot. I really like this.

Looking forward to more! I will haye to see it end!

One little bitty typo correction you may want to make: Abraham leaned in further and took the Harry’s earlobe into his mouth. He moaned as the vampire suckled on his ear. I do not think you want the word "the" before Harry's earlobe to be there. I hope it is okay I pointed this out? I have never done it, but I thought that I would want to know.

_inzilbeth_ August 25 2005, 02:22:45 UTC

Opps, my bad, that should be, hate to see it end!

alecto_chan August 26 2005, 15:46:10 UTC

I thought the plot a bit predictable as I was writing it, but maybe because I'm the one writing it, lol. I don't mind being corrected at all. Even with a beta, things get overlooked, especially since I've re-written almost half of certain scenes after running it through her. Thank you for pointing out the typo and commenting!

angel_liam August 26 2005, 02:30:31 UTC

soo, finally I am through all thee chapters, too. (i am so happy that I am such a slow reader that I didn't have to wait at the end of chapter ten, but could read on, that was a mean cliffhanger at the end of chapter ten)

Ahh, finally Severus knows, I am happy about Harry, I don't like ff's where he doesn't know it for a long time. But I am pretty sure that Dumbledore knew from the first minute he saw "Cedric", otherwise he wouldn't have pointed it out to Severus.

And I liked the chapter (11) very much, it is interesting, and it has this thrill. But i have to say (as non-native-speaker) that this chapter was far more difficult to read and to follow in the plot than the others. I am not sure, if that's because of your choice of words or the kind of writing, but it was more difficult than before. I hope thee next gets easier again, LOL. But neverthless I won't stop reading, so don't worry*g*

Ah, but I like the scenes where Harry gets this "bloodlust" and wants Severus, uuh, and that kiss, I loved it!*g* Keep going like that!*g*

alecto_chan August 26 2005, 15:50:42 UTC

Heh, I suppose it does look like Dumbledore knows, but in truth, he has no freaking clue. Well, that's what I imagined at least. My feelings are that if Dumbledore really knew, he would have called Harry out on his own without stringing Severus along for the trip. I know most fanfics write it otherwise, but I feel the complete opposite.

I'm sorry that this chapter was more difficult for you. I admit this chapter is a bit heavier than most of the others. I hope you got the gist of the plot though. Maybe my explanations for plot points were a bit convoluted?

Thanks for commenting!