fic: five times anakin skywalker falls in love (and one time he doesn't) [anakin, ensemble, PT]

[albumsontheside]

HAPPY BIRTHDAY, zigsternenstaub. HAVE A FIC GIFT, Y/Y?

Title: Five Times Anakin Skywalker Falls in Love (And One Time He Doesn't)
Author: albumsontheside
Characters: Anakin Skywalker, ensemble.
Timeline: TPM-ROTS
Word Count: 2091
Summary: The first time Anakin Skywalker falls in love, he's seven years old and bleeding with a cut on his knee and it is indefinable, intangible and the

Comments

[luminations]

You seriously wrote this in AN HOUR??? I am in awe! It flows so nicely, and I was even able to read the Obi-Wan part cuz I knew you wouldn't slash it up XD

Lovely fic... and the end is kind of a punch to the gut - but, erm, in a good way? I think the Padme part is my favorite. Particularly the "are you an angel" comparison of 9-year-old Ani to 18-year-old Ani!

Nice work, Sammy. *gold star for you!*

[albumsontheside]

Yup. See, I had it all planned out, and from there it was merely a question of getting the damned thing on paper. At 2am. M mother despaired,

*accepts gold star* YA I'M SPESHULLLLL :D

How are you, hun?

[luminations]

I'm happy it's Friday, Oh Special One!

Gah, I miss going back and forth in comment threads with you while I'm at work. Booooooooooo. Stupid work making us work instead of play on the interwebz :(

[albumsontheside]

ICON TWINS.

*hugs* I miss our crack threads too. We must crack thread sometime, y/y? I mean, we still haven't resolved just what Dooku did with That Arm ...

[albumsontheside]

*hugs* Aww, thanks hun! How are YOU, professional writer you? ;)

Review part the first 1

[zigsternenstaub]

Let me firstly say that when you told me that you were writing me a fic for my birthday, I could only expect something wonderful, because I know for a fact how wonderful, and how powerful, a writer you are. That said, I did not expect this, because this so far surpassed my expectations that it left my mind wiped utterly clean with awe and longing. You have a razor-sharp insight, for not only did you cut straight to the heart of Anakin's character, you also cut to mine--this longing for freedom, this furious need...you embodied it so beautifully in bits and snatches, in thoughts and gusts of wind, and thwarted desires and the understanding that a child should not have, but did, and in the essential contradictions of life and compulsion, expressed in paranthetical whispers as raw as open wounds.

So, I'll review this in parts, as you wrote it.

i.:

he's seven years old and bleeding with a cut on his knee and it is indefinable, intangible and the defining moment of his life.A marvellous opening, as we are acquainted immediately with

Re: Review part the first 1

[albumsontheside]

OH MY GOD! I am so glad you liked this, hun! I've never really received such a review before :D

You have a razor-sharp insight, for not only did you cut straight to the heart of Anakin's character, you also cut to mine

Woah. I mean, I don't really know you that well off-LJ, so it's quite strange to be told something like this! I'm really glad you think s, hun, and that you admired your present so much :)

I'm going o continue answering your next comments (Part 1! WOW!), but, suffice it to say, I think you are so kind to write me all this. Feeds my ego and all :D

Happy birthday, you. [tbc]

Re: Review part the first 1

[zigsternenstaub]

I mean, I don't really know you that well off-LJ, so it's quite strange to be told something like this!

Possibly a subconscious perception from my journal writings? Who knows! It was beautifully fitting in any case!

Re: Review part the first 1

[albumsontheside]

Okay, I'll come clean. I ... used the Force.

Review Part the First 2

[zigsternenstaub]

The speed is intoxicating, dangerously so, and the wind eats at his hair like a starved child, raking at him with taloned fingernails, sharper than knives. And this, this is unreal, the world he has been searching for: the feeling of vastness, of space, of his own, insignificant body, lost in the sky --

Yes, yes, yes! And there it is--the reason why he goes on. Snatches of freedom, pieces of the sky, the things that make enduring reality worth the suffering! You've shown so well here his wild character--the infant hawk, the growing young tiger, the creature that is (as I recently discussed with someone) too furious and too broken to be of any practical use, but that everyone wants to possess, because he is too magnificent to watch fly away.

Bib Fortuna's upper lip curls in distaste.

Nice nod to continuity.

(The sky puts no prices on another man's life. )I think that this is perhaps my favourite line of all in this story, because it is the one that acknowledges that vast, boundless universe, against which Anakin's pain just keeps

Re: Review Part the First 2

[albumsontheside]

And there it is--the reason why he goes on. Snatches of freedom, pieces of the sky, the things that make enduring reality worth the suffering!

ty! I mean, he's always said how he likes flying and wants to see the stars and suchlike, and I always thought that it was an ESCAPE from reality, you know? Like, a coping mechanism for a child that has too much to cope with ...

Nice nod to continuity.

LOL. I love giving minor characters cameos. What can I say ...?

it is the one that acknowledges that vast, boundless universe, against which Anakin's pain just keeps going and going and going, without answer, and without end.

<3

Review Part the second

[zigsternenstaub]

ii.:

she's a fourteen-year-old Queen with more guilt than he can imagine and eyes harder than a durasteel bar.

Very much in keeping with the character of TPM Amidala, before we truly met 'Padmé.' Amidala was harder, colder, and very focused. She, too, had the unyielding determination of childhood, because growing up muddied the waters.

(He doesn't know the first two yet, and is too old to know how to avoid the last, so he pays no attention to either of them, and lives in the moment.)

It's very true that Anakin ignores anything inconvenient to him until he is not longer able to ignore it, at which point he becomes petulant and angry.

The scent of power rolls off her in intoxicating waves, her disguise as apparent as her routinely-applied perfume, and it is this that attracts him, this that brings in him with it's brilliant strangeness, more foreign than she is.A fascinating perspective, and a perspective that is likely to be true--a slave would know power when he saw it, because it is the one thing he would desire above all

Re: Review Part the second

[albumsontheside]

She, too, had the unyielding determination of childhood, because growing up muddied the waters.

THIS. I mean, I don't believe that Padmé was all that mentally stable -- not in that way -- during the PT. I mean, from a young child she basically had to create this dual persona for herself, and then live her life the way an adult would, and in AOTC she admits that she's basically sacrificed herself, willingly, to do this. She'd be depressed at the very least, I imagine, and I think that could have also been what attracted Anakin to her, the fact that she's just as flawed as he is, deep down :/

It's very true that Anakin ignores anything inconvenient to him until he is not longer able to ignore it,

YES. CANON. SO MUCH. :D

a slave would know power when he saw it, because it is the one thing he would desire above all others,

And hence why I think this set the background for his future fucked-uppery. Except, I kind of rambled about it in that meta, so I think I'll shut up now and not repeat myself.

And...this is only the physical and

Re: Review Part the second

[zigsternenstaub]

I mean, from a young child she basically had to create this dual persona for herself, and then live her life the way an adult would, and in AOTC she admits that she's basically sacrificed herself, willingly, to do this.

Er, yeah. I mean, I love that they actually did something different with Naboo, something that you don't see on Earth, and I understand the probable sentiment behind the concept--that children are inherently less corrupt than adults, simply because they've had less time to become cynical and power-hungry-- but children who train from adolescence to be politicians must be quite fucked up later on in life.

Re: Review Part the second

[albumsontheside]

THIS. And, I mean, who's to say that they aren't less cynical? I mean, in TPM Padmé does seem overly idealistic (the Senate will solve your problems? Reeeeeally?) but by AOTC ... I've always felt sorry for her, and as such hated most fic's 2-D portrayal of her :/