Untitled sequel: Chapter 2

[aj_rayne]

I'm not writing fast--I've actually just been stockpiling. =D Unfortunately, this is the last whole chapter I've written so it may be a while before the next one comes out.

In case you didn't realize it, this is going to be a Tokka fic. As of yet, I am not sure if Katara and Zuko will make an appearance. I'm trying to plan this one out better than

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[sableambiguity]

Eeek, Sokka. I felt for him. Not to mention, I am very much a fan of this being a Tokka fic--even though I would love to see you extend your Somewhere In Between ZK past just that lovely drabble series you've uploaded here. I'm greedy, what can I say.

Oh, and SO SORRY it took me so long to get to this. Wow. I fail. But I do love Iron Chef? 8'D /lame

On with my nitpicking...

In the sentence:
He them handed Sokka a cup of bitter tasting tea which he swallowed in one gulp.
Them = then?

And here:
The pain returned sharply when healer tightened the bandage on his fractured forearm and he had to fight to keep his eyes from rolling to the back of his head.
'When the healer...'

When Toph says:
"So what's the verdict," she asked, reading his thoughts.
That should be a question mark, since she's asking.

The very next paragraph, when the healer says:
"It was at least a clean break, sir," the healer explained. "It will take 2 months to heal and you will be in some pain for a few weeks."The 'sir' thing threw me off. Since Toph asked, I

[aj_rayne]

Thanks so much for this! I'm sorry I haven't had a chance to put them in yet. Classes started and I'm a little out of sorts. Hopefully I'll be able to get to writing again once I catch my breath...

But until then, Thanks thanks thank you!

[sableambiguity]

You are so very welcome!

And certainly take your time. One thing I'm so very thankful for is being well and done with uni, haha. I know how that goes. :)