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[aisling87]

 
Happiness in a bottle.

I didn't have much time to work on this this week -- therefore it makes little sense.

Comments

[ofshootingstars]

Hi I'm one of your editors! I'm very sorry about how late this is, but school has been catching up on me and I've just had no time at all.

Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this piece. Grammatically, I can see no mistakes. I liked how you interpreted "happiness in a bottle" and made it different and unique. At the same time, it works as a metaphor to things we associate in this society, now. I liked the italicized parts at the beginning and end; they are beautifully written. Your descriptions are also well done and the piece flows well.

I think you've done a wonderful job with this piece. Well done.

[aisling87]

Thank you for your edit. No worries about being late -- I know how that goes! Good luck with school and thanks again. :)