Comments | aidenface: Possession, NC17

aidenface

Possession, NC17

Jul 09, 2009 15:32

Title: Possession
Author/Artist: aidenface
Pairing(s): Albus Severus/James
Rating: NC17
Summary: Albus has something he doesn’t want: James.
Word Count: 413
Warnings: Incest, obviously. Slight dub-con?
Disclaimer: All Harry Potter characters herein are the property of J.K. Rowling and Bloomsbury/Scholastic. No copyright infringement is intended.
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fiction, albus/james, rating: r

Comments 5

elisebanana July 10 2009, 14:50:02 UTC

Err, you've spelled "orgasm" as " organism", btw.

Other than that it was really good- so much anger!

aidenface July 11 2009, 02:27:23 UTC

oh boy. thank you, both for the correction and comment!

heraldofdarknes July 13 2009, 16:54:10 UTC

I feel a bit strange about this fic. Yes, it's hot, but there's something a little empty to it. I want to know -why- Albus is so angry. Why James has put himself in this position. I like the premise, but I want so much more than a drabble.

Good setup, but it needs more meat.

tiger_tyger July 13 2009, 18:54:32 UTC

I agree. I think there is a lot of milage in expanding the story.

bryoneybrynn July 14 2009, 16:13:21 UTC

Hmmmm. Very intriguing. I'm so interested in the back story, what brought them to this place, why Albus is so angry and why James seems to want this. A very different Albus than we usually see - I liked it. I really liked his coldness and you could just feel how consumed he was by anger in that moment.

One small typo - you have "ass check" instead of "ass cheek."

Great job!