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Sparring

Mar 19, 2007 21:00

Title: Sparring
Author: Ahoytheship
Characters: Almost exclusively Zoe/Wash, with a wee bit of Mal thrown in for good measure, but a very wee bit.
Rating: Let's call it PG-13 to be safe, but I look forward to trying my hand at some more intense matter later on
Timeline: Pre-series, pre-relationship
Summary: Well that would be cheating, now wouldn't it ( Read more... )

Comments 6

krys33 March 20 2007, 02:25:48 UTC

That was so full of awesome that I don't know where to begin. What a way to enter the fandom! Wonderful job, and I look forward to seeing more from you soon. :)

ahoytheship March 20 2007, 02:31:57 UTC

Thanks so much! I am excited to be a part of it :)

sarahetc March 20 2007, 18:31:43 UTC

Great start! It's an interesting idea, Zoe teaching Wash how to fight-- takes the pacifist trope and really follows through in a way nobody seems to cover much of.

I like the way you've got her always calling him, "Pilot." It's a refreshing change from fanon's "flyboy" and I think it really drives home the point that he eventually makes about her, which is that she doesn't let anyone in or even let anyone get close. You've got her correcting herself at the climax of the story, "Pilot, no, Wash" and that's a fantastic nod to her terseness ( ... )

ahoytheship March 20 2007, 21:39:23 UTC

I really appreciate your words, sarahetc. I can't think of a better way to be encouraged to write more in this fanon. I've dabbled here and there in many universes, and it's always nice to know that a foray for the first time into a new one was somewhat worth it! I look at the story now and see lots of little punctuation errors and the like, but I wrote in in a day and was itching to get it up. I'll gladly pass any work along for your eyes in the future :)

-thumbs up- razycrandomgirl March 21 2007, 08:08:12 UTC

you wrote this in one day? that's impressive! and welcome to the fandom. ;-D -puts on old english man voice- "why it feels like it was just yesterday that I was posting my very first Firefly ..." I'm kidding! lol
Welcome again! :-D

stormkpr March 21 2007, 01:45:38 UTC

I was hooked early on by great lines like these:

" Don’t worry folks, I am here at last to assist you in a helpful and masculine manner!”

You totally captured the characters. I love the image of Zoe teaching Wash to fight and that event being what finally gets them together - perfect!

I can't wait to see what else you'll write in this fandom!