For my own records...

[agilebrit]

Because I know she's going to delete it AGAIN, and there goes my review. So, here it is:

Okay, better

Comments

[agilebrit]

*nods* Eight would explain a LOT. Other than the sex. If she's eight, the Angel-having-sex-with-a-twelve-year-old-Slayer goes from "a little creepy" to "downright disturbing."

Damb, I wish I'd saved that story to my hard drive...

[baron_waste]

I give you major, admiring credit for even trying. My "review" would have been This is utter crap, and a waste of the electricity your computer used while you were writing it. Get a job.

Which would not have been helpful at all.

Yet neither would it have been wrong...

[agilebrit]

Very true, on both counts. However, I'm going to go out on a limb and assume this writer is VERY young...and she's shown a willingness to take advice (by at least getting rid of "sinus" and editing the story so it wasn't in script format). So, I'd rather take someone like that by the hand and steer them toward penning something that they can look back on with pride, rather than cringing at.

Now, if she'd filled my inbox with screaming, whiny flames, or stuck a note on her profile hollering about meanies with no lives and wondering why grammar matters, the gloves would have come off. Right now, I'm giving her the benefit of the doubt.

[bojojoti]

I think you are right that she is very young. Twelve may seem grown up to her, therefore she doesn't think "pedophile," she thinks "grown up love." I hope you do get through to her.

[agilebrit]

Well, if she's under 13, then she shouldn't be posting at FFN at all. :-| They're growing up way too fast if she thinks that a twelve-year-old child having sex with a vampire ten times her age is acceptable.

Either that, or something else is going on with her. I shudder to think.