I'ma just leave this here:
The Legalities of Shooting People.
ETA: Okay, I realize that everyone is having a blast smacking Clamps around like a cheap pinata, but I'm going to bow out at this point in time. I have a Sunday deadline I'm desperately trying to hit on a story that's making me crazy
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Shudkhers, vaguely reptilian or piscine with inhumanly sapient eyes and almost slippery and scaly skin of moss green or rust or light gray, tridactyl feet and sharp sickle claws. I jumped in a cleft in the ground, and a wave of shudkhers leapt above me.
We went into a cave network as shelter from the simoons and the marauding shudkhers. Where coarse sand had poured in through cracks and where dusty sunlight streamed through, cacti and manzanita and succulents grew under. In darker recesses, there were growths like severed and melted hands on naked rock and on chunks of machinery so wracked and ruined I could no longer determine what they were once part of, but if I had to guess, they were mining equipment, glowing a neon orange.
Please tell me this is a first draft.
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A lot of Requiem is just set pieces that need to be linked together somehow and guess what, it's still light years better than anything Vox Day wrote.
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Son, you would have to climb a very tall ladder to stoop that low.
I imagine it would have been a lame and predictable comparison between myself and Mr. Merrick. Congratulations for having the minimum level of perspicacity to figure out what a pathetic move that would have been on your part.
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You should give up on trying to insult people, because you're really not very good at it.
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No. No, it's not. It's turgid, amateurish, and wordy, is what it is, and makes me want to scramble for a gross of red pens.
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Knighton isn't turgid and amateurish?
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There's a lot of "tone" stuff in fantasy and science fiction. My secondary-world fantasy has a far different tone than my space opera, and my angel stories have a different tone than my urban fantasies starring this guy. Word choice comes into that, a lot. Turgid is as turgid does, and amateurish speaks for itself.
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I think The War In Heaven actually had an editor. His newer generic fantasyland novels are filled with tautologies and other bad things.
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