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afterwejump

The Genesis of Kim Joonmyun

Sep 06, 2013 23:50

Title: The Genesis of Kim Joonmyun
Pairing: sulay
Rating: PG-13
Length: 1691 words
Summary: Kim Joonmyun's existence hangs on a thread wrapped around Yixing's finger.

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l: oneshot, p: sulay, g: angst

Comments 7

kfangirl4 September 7 2013, 04:58:40 UTC

WOW I LOVE THIS SO MUCH

notemoperfect September 7 2013, 06:41:56 UTC

i had nooo idea where this fic was going and the entire time i was thinking to myself "please let bbs be okay"
THE SIGH OF RELIEF that came when it turns out yixing is a writer
but /sobs/ he fell in love with his own creation
i'm going to reread this. the way it's kind of going in reverse is interesting haha

nadinadara September 7 2013, 12:06:21 UTC

wow I love this
it feels good to be able to read something out of the ordinary; formatted in an entirely different manner, at times.
and it's amazing how yixing lets himself fall in love with junmyeon...if only he'd caught the person whose coin fell from his pocket..if only he'd run after him..if only junmyeon had actually gotten injured. ..ugh the "what is" chapter sobs I just CAN'T. they met in a different world alright....but... /sighs

wowweeee I love this ♡

clap13times September 8 2013, 12:59:04 UTC

Okay I got to confess, Sulay is one of the only ships I don't like at all. But idk why, this caught my attention and, pairing aside, this was great! Tbh the plot is - in my opinion - nothing completely new but I think I've never seen someone implement it so nicely and well written - and bc I suck at commenting here have my two favorite lines, just so you know.

(In truth, Joonmyun is a parasite living inside of Yixing's heart, but Yixing insists that's where he belongs.)
perfect metapor #1

Joonmyun has spent his entire life borrowing hours and squeezing out spare seconds.
perfect metaphor #2 sighhhhhh

thanks a lot for publishing this!

miniwaffles September 11 2013, 18:34:24 UTC

I love the way you format your story with the chapters backtracking but the little details from the last - i mean ahead - chapters are still in the next. The dinner, the tissue, everything. I love the original ending rather than the alternative one. I guess you can merge the two and spin it off into one ending. Your writing is beautiful and this is as beautiful.