Like you imagined when you were young

[aesthetically]

OK OK OK so o///o

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This is the story I mentioned on Plurk. This is canon, but it doesn't really happen in the story. It's super pre-story. But I like this scene, so I decided to write it before I forgot it entirely. Even if only Layne & I read it, which I fully expect, I'm having fun writing it.

Title: When You Were Young (1/2)
Words: 2,

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[lintwhite]

"Look at it this way," said Ashe, with a sigh, "Think of the rarest fruit you know."

"... Okay."

"I probably, or at my parents, know someone who grows it."

These lines. These are good lines.

[lintwhite]

Seriously, though.

[lintwhite]

THIS STORY.

[thelastsong]

Since you asked for feedback, and there was one thing I noticed... is that this line:

It was truly the best of both worlds; she couldn't claim it provided much privacy, as she lived in an apartment in a suburb.

felt a little apropos of nothing. Saying "It was the best of both worlds" and then "it wasn't very private" didn't really connect to each other. Maybe "It was truly the best of borth worlds, even if it didn't full a need for privacy" or something like that?

Anyway. It's cute! I also liked that thing about rare fruit.

[nepheliad]

I suck. At feedback. But trust me. I loved it.