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New Tracks, Part 11

Aug 16, 2010 19:50

"New Tracks" by AelfgyfuPARTS: 20 plus epilogue ( Read more... )

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kristen_mara August 17 2010, 09:06:30 UTC

A lot to love in this chapter! Nick is learning that sometimes silence pays off (tested first with Lester earlier, then with Stephen now) and I love how he tries to help Stephen at 2am... They're making progress!

Yay and hee for the banter between Abby, Connor, Noel and Stephen *G*

////Stephen's week could only get better after the first two days.////

I'm not sure it will, sweetie... *eyes the author with justifiable suspicion*

aelfgyfu_mead August 17 2010, 11:53:04 UTC

Ah, you know me too well!

fredbassett August 17 2010, 09:35:47 UTC

Looks like Noel is finally getting the hang of his job, and even starting to relax a bit!

aelfgyfu_mead August 17 2010, 11:53:22 UTC

Noel could stand to relax a lot.

canadian_jay August 17 2010, 13:58:42 UTC

Love the slightly awkward banter amongst Noel, Stephen, Abby, and Connor! This was a great chapter - we actually get somewhere, heh! And clever you, thinking of that for the tracking!

aelfgyfu_mead August 17 2010, 17:05:02 UTC

we actually get somewhere
Yes, and that doesn't happen often in my fic! ;-)

And clever you, thinking of that for the tracking!
Thank you! (I felt very clever when I wrote that bit!)

lukadreaming August 17 2010, 14:42:29 UTC

I like the mix here of the slightly awkward banter (Noel seems to be loosening up a touch!), Nick and Stephen advancing about a centimetre and that action at the end with frustrated Stephen trying to help Noel from a distance.

aelfgyfu_mead August 17 2010, 17:06:04 UTC

Thanks! Poor Stephen is frustrated at nearly every turn in this story.

nietie August 17 2010, 15:00:39 UTC

Poor Stephen still has a long way to go and it must be hard to keep the spirits up. So I loved that scene where he's bantering with Abby, Connor and Noel. "Obviously, he doesn't realise that perfection like this doesn't come simply from towelling off." LOL

And eek! for the cliffhangery thingy.

aelfgyfu_mead August 17 2010, 17:07:23 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

The cliffhanger wasn't really deliberate, I must admit: I wrote this all as one novel story and only did the breakdown later, and I didn't really want to put a break here. It would be a very long part if I didn't, however.