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adriatic_air

Bonds in Blood Chapter 3, Part I

Jul 22, 2007 01:16

I realize this is long overdue, and hasten to make my amendments.

Details on Fic

Title: Bonds in Blood

Status: Writing in Progress

Warning: Slight swearing, graphic violence, implied limes, and eventual lemons. Bi/Homosexuality.

Genre: Action/Adventure/Romance/Humor/Supernatural

Disclaimer: Read at your own risk.

A/N: LALALA I AM A PROCRASTINATOR SO ( Read more... )

bonds in blood

Comments 15

anonymous July 22 2007, 13:13:36 UTC

Now the story's getting up and interesting. I really liked the way you described the high tech stuff and the way you build things up. There really is alot of 'i will kill you' thing in Ash.

Anyway, that was good! I expect you to have a thoroughly good plot with mega cool stuff and many twists. =D

Just curious, why did you make Ash faint?

adriatic_air July 22 2007, 15:15:11 UTC

Thank you for saying it's interesting!! I was just starting to get bored of it. (Hence the long wait) Yes I did try my best in the description of the plane... *is touched* And I didn't mean to build things up. Did I?

Well, great. :D

"thoroughly good plot with mega cool stuff and many twists". O_O I will certainly try my best to deliever, and helpful comments along the way will be highly appreciated! XD

Oh. Um. I don't know. Because she just seemed like someone who would faint? Ash feels too much, really. People who are extreme are like that. So the fear kind of built up in her, I guess, and caused a fainting fit.

anonymous July 23 2007, 08:42:57 UTC

"Standard protocol"

Hahaha..was just re-reading it. Its still as amusing. I didn't think Dan would be a womanizer, he reminds me of ohmanwhatshisname- ROY! yes Roy, oh gosh I forgot his name. Hey wait, how does Dan look like other than being extremely handsome? How does Ash look like? Does she have long hair? Oh gosh, I've been picturing Dan to look something like Roy with Yuki's eyes and Ash to look like a female Sasuke, which is not difficult at all considering how pretty he is. Did you describe them? Okay I must go back to read the beginning. oops.

jumpintime-

adriatic_air July 23 2007, 09:02:30 UTC

Why would Dan remind you of Roy? Lol, um, to tell the truth,Dan is kinda a smooth looks kind of guy, with delicate features. He is modelled slightly after Dan in Naruto anime (Tsunade's boyfriend), only with a modern twist, short black hair and all. He doesn't really have very striking features, if you remember, but definitely pretty.

Roy is more of the Sasuke type, don't you think? Only Sasuke is a million times hotter. I really think Sasuke and his brother are the sexiest things in anime... *hot* The genes, dang, it's the genes! I was reading Naruto manga, and Itachi is just looking............... :SALDFJLS:FJ AL:S JL:AFJ L:ASD A:LKAJL:LJA:LEOIOEIOEIH:HDSDHKLSHL.

And Ash has LONG HAIR! Damn, didn't I mention it somewhere? She looks a bit like the girl in transformers... if you watched it. In other words, hot stuff. XD

anonymous July 23 2007, 09:19:37 UTC

Hmm..Cause you definitely mentioned it somewhere that Dan as black hair. I really liked Dan in Naruto! He reminds me of Keiki! Must be the long silky hair. =D

Itachi..I think Itachi is a tad bit hotter and prettier than Sasuke, so I can't seem to hate him even after all the dark fics and stuff. And he's a bloody prodigy. I love the times when Sasuke was so young and Itachi was alr a freaking prodigy and was his nice big brother. And I seem to accept Itachi like, oh okkay, an evil person. He would be spoiled if he were good. And the red eyes work for him. And because he has such perfect features and everything, I am not all that taken with the cosplay of Itachi.

Anyway..hurry up and write bonds in blood. How far have you gone with the plot and characters?

jumpintime-

adriatic_air July 23 2007, 09:26:24 UTC

Yeah, Itachi is sexy when bad. I really can't hate him either. *suffers a violent nosebleed*

I have decided to do thorough editing from this point on. So you might have to wait when it comes to updates! I apologize in advance.

you are good anonymous July 23 2007, 12:06:41 UTC

i couldn't stop reading this,
and i even reread the previous!
you better have a good story in mind.
i shall kill you myself if you should EVER
decide to stop halfway. don't you get bored with this
thing. i haven't had half the fun i want to have with kiba yet.

this supernatural twist is smart!
reminds me of avalon high and the mediator.
hahahahha.
or even the abhorsen! inspiration? *clayrs.

keep those fingers busy typing!

lovelovelove,
IAN. :D

Re: you are good adriatic_air July 23 2007, 14:07:01 UTC

XD Oh, you just provided me with a very happy reason to continue! Though I never planned on giving up actually. Just took a short break.

And oh, my god. Abhorsen is absolutely beyond my humble standards. O_O I didn't get any inspiration from there though, which part reminded you of it? -^_^-

aim high and beyond! anonymous July 25 2007, 10:45:57 UTC

hahaha, that's the tristan girls' high motto. heehee, distraction.
ANYWAY. it isnt (too far) beyond and you know it! how about the watery wednesdays and ticklish tuesdays or whatever they're called? remember that series?? hardly comparable to kiba! i mean, bonds in blood. so there.

the resemblance is in the supernatural! and like how i'm guessing ash could be on her way to abhorsen work, or something. but i could just be having too incoherent thoughts too. i hate chem.

counting down to brownie and tartufo! <3s.

love,
guess who!

ps. i know you're done with chem. don't remind me.
pps. triple yoggi!:D:D:D

Re: aim high and beyond! adriatic_air July 25 2007, 13:42:38 UTC

*is glad you felt the need to comment even with chem hovering like some kind of death threat behind your back...* LOL. Good luck, I would give you tons of help, if you let me. Let's just say, learn those ionic equations! And Q&A!

I have no idea if you'll see this in time. XD

It's Mister Monday, Grim Tuesday, and Something Wednesday. I didn't follow that series much. Ahahaha. Your loyalty to Kiba amuses me.

PS. PISTACHIO IS DA BOMB. I am going to try... dark chocolate the next time. Maybe cookies and cream too! XD And another round of rum and raisin, who knows?

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omg hitplayer July 24 2007, 10:45:24 UTC

the thing i totally missed out for not going to the comp for so long.

SERIOUSLY, this is my favourite chapter so far! OMG, you are so good, I don't even know where to begin to tell you haha.

Hmmm, the undertones in the narrative are amusing, and you really held the whole thing together well. yes i love the plot, the little dramas like ash fainting, dan flirting and the whole private jet thing. WOW! :DDDDDDD this has just made my day, highly entertaining and engaging, ilovethis<3

OMGG. new fave author(:
bonds in blood, all the way!

Re: omg adriatic_air July 25 2007, 08:37:11 UTC

"the undertones in the narrative are amusing"

Glad you liked them! Sometimes I think I'm seriously made of undertones, and undertones only. *must learn to write more action*

well, thank you for the nice comment, and the, um. e-mail. I realize you do things in a highly unorthodox manner, therefore I will not say anything about smses and more lj comments being sufficient.

(*O*)/