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Fanfic 100 [NCIS]: Harbinger {1/1}

Mar 11, 2009 12:04

Title: Harbinger
Fandom: NCIS
Pairings: Undertones of Kate/Ari, Kate/Gibbs
Prompt: 035 - sixth sense // round 12 at prompt_in_a_box: Good Night, Good night! Parting is such sweet sorrow, that I shall say good night till it be morrow - William Shakespeare, Romeo and Juliet, 2.2
Word Count: 1,775 words
Rating: Teen/FR13+ for language
Disclaimer: All characters ( Read more... )

pairing: kate/gibbs, fic: ncis, character: kate todd, fic: all, fic challenge: fanfic100ncis, pairing: kate/ari, fandom: ncis

Comments 18

sundance201 March 12 2009, 22:19:22 UTC

Read it over again and I think it's absolutely brilliant. These two lines really stood out to me as just being....amazing. :P

Four, she amends, counting them off - Gerald, Gibbs, her breath hitches, Kate and then Ari.

And if she can't stop herself from looking for someone, she tries not to think about kind eyes and what Gibbs would do if he ever found out.

The first one just because it's just...creepy? In a way. I don't know how to describe it, but I love it.

And the second one because that is SO Kate/Ari. I love their interaction and the fact that it could never just be the two of them in a relationship. Gibbs would always factor into it.

astral_angel March 12 2009, 22:56:24 UTC

Man, I'm sitting here grinning like an idiot because of this. Thanks.

^^ Seriously, this review made my day. And it's been a sucky day, so double yay.

I actually didn't think that first line was great - it actually bothered me a bit, and I was considering pulling it out completely. It is creepy, in a way, and I'm pretty sure I've left out a comma somewhere because it doesn't really make a whole lot of sense, but yeah.

the fact that it could never just be the two of them in a relationship. Gibbs would always factor into it.

And I &hearts that you picked up on the last line, because that is what I was sort of getting at and I though maybe it wasn't coming across properly.

My fave line in this would be this one: Ari, Ari, Ari who wipes blood off your lip and puts a bullet in your brain, for a whole list of reasons, really.

But yeah, I'm so glad that you liked it!

margaretmoony May 8 2009, 06:13:06 UTC

That was cool.

astral_angel May 11 2009, 01:18:35 UTC

Thanks! ^^

haltlos June 8 2009, 09:08:52 UTC

I just read it and thinl it is pretty awesome - in a dark twisted way of course. ;) (And I like it twisted.)

astral_angel June 8 2009, 20:05:53 UTC

^^ Thank you! Twisted is fun. I have no idea where this came from, actually. :)

agentkgibbs October 27 2021, 06:29:07 UTC

This is definitely interesting, and I like it.