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addicterated

Call The Shots Chapter 4

Sep 19, 2011 05:28

And then I bring ya'll porn. I had some struggle with this, I don't know if I'm just being my usual self-critical self or what. Anyway, I hope you enjoy. Comments are love. Etc.

Title: Call The Shots Chapter 4
Pairing: Onew/Taemin
Length: 5639
Genre: Romance/BDSM
Rating: NC17
Summary: Jinki takes exception to all the ass shaking from Taemin in ( Read more... )

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Comments 27

min7girl September 19 2011, 10:58:20 UTC

OMG, this is like the best day ever!!!

Ok, gonna go read now!

min7girl September 19 2011, 11:25:51 UTC

A thing of beauty is a joy forever, but a thing of lube is forever joy.

I do think this is my fav of yours!!!! Yes I do. I always want to expound on these and wax poetic about each part.

I love it so!!! I'll be back I swear.

addicterated September 23 2011, 13:11:55 UTC

You are so cute lol. I'm digging the hair flip icon too. Any time you want to expound you go right ahead. I need a bigger head *g*

Thank you so much!

undeniablysarah September 19 2011, 13:27:38 UTC

Oh my gosh
What a great way to start the day
I can't even form sentences right now
888DDD

So while I was reading this I got a flash of this one part in Harry potter 4 and I have no idea why o_0
The part where voldemort is like "I can touch you now" and then Harry is screaming and shit
I guess my brian made that odd connection of jinki being all "I can touch u now that we are alone mwhahahaha"
So yeah jinki I guess is lord voldemort
Did that make any sense
No
I blame u and this amazing story

Ok legit I re-read this entire story last night for no reason...I just had an urge "let's re-read that hot story! I wonder when it will be updated" and then BAM it is!!!!!!!!!

SMExy goodness for me!!!! Kya I can't even
Jinki is so hot omg I want to just.....
I want to be in taemin's place

Dear lord help me I'm at school with a girl hard on
Majsisgsgskwib

Ok I'm done ttyl sexy beast writer

addicterated September 23 2011, 13:13:19 UTC

*Giggles* This was such a cute comment. And Jinki is the sexy beast, I'm just expressing him lols. And to be in Taemin's place is a dream within a dream *g*

Thank you so much for reading and commenting :)

imvus September 19 2011, 15:01:04 UTC

yeah!!!! runs off to read!

imvus September 19 2011, 15:43:15 UTC

That was so emotionally intense for both of them.

I mean Taemin needed Jinki but loves him so much that he doesn't want to be selfish and ask him for the attention he needs (which only makes Jinki love him more)

And poor Jinki realizes his mistake and feels guilty but at the same time needs to tell Taemin not to hold back and act out instead of letting him no of his needs.

This Jinki is soooooo freaky sexy. (I'm glad he has so much control otherwise he would be scary)

addicterated September 23 2011, 13:20:57 UTC

This fic is hard on some levels because there's sooooo much happening and not all of it is expressed or can be expressed.

Jinki's in a tough spot really and I think he handles it well and there's reasons for everything he does. I was really happy with how he behaved actually. And I don't find him scary at all, lol. Thank you so much for reading and commenting as ever.

imvus September 23 2011, 20:36:55 UTC

I hope you didn't misunderstand. I wasn't saying that Jinki was scary, I find him extremely attractive with the amount of self control he has especially with how possessive he can be with Taemin. What would have been scary is if he didn't have that self control and love for Taemin along with the possessiveness. :)

stjoan4eva September 19 2011, 21:01:47 UTC

@_@

That was one *hell* of an emotional roller-coaster, there. Holy shit.

Kudos for having Jinki recognize that a good chunk of the issue at hand was actually his fault. *applauds*

addicterated September 23 2011, 13:22:46 UTC

Yeah, there was so much in this, way more than I really thought out when I began writing it - so I hope I did it some kind of justice.

I felt it was important for Jinki to acknowledge that he was the one who missed the boat and ultimately responsible. And really if the Dom/me is the one in control then he or she is always ultimately responsible I think.

Thank you so much for reading and commenting :)

acornmama September 20 2011, 00:07:01 UTC

What an intense world you paint. I was on edge with both of them. Jinki and Taemin remembering that communication is the only way.
This was hot and amazing. What didn't you like about it?

addicterated September 23 2011, 13:37:49 UTC

Eh, there's a lot of stuff in here, emotionally speaking and I just wasn't satisfied with how I portrayed it but that's me being silly I guess.

Thank you for reading and commenting :)

acornmama September 23 2011, 16:30:16 UTC

Nah, it's not silly. My question then becomes is this the unsatisfied that would have you do it again or the the kind that has you saying "screw it I did what I could.?"

From where I am sitting it fit in well the previous chapters and made sense and was sexy so I enjoyed it....but then I did not write it.