Comments | addict_a_fic: 30 days of writing challenge on/tae intervention day 4

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30 days of writing challenge on/tae intervention day 4

Aug 23, 2012 21:51

Intervention is not on the prompt list but I chose it to use because it fit where I wanted this to go.

1377 words They aren't holding hands; aren't even touching but Taemin feels strange because they aren't.

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ontae, my fic: writing challenge, prompt: intervention, 30 days of writing challenge, i love my otp

Comments 7

imvus August 25 2012, 01:50:28 UTC

Omg let them shower together please...

Okay I will behave. (damnit! stomps feets and pouts)

But they are talking..yessssss

and Taemin was so cute with the trying girls and pretending to be sick on his date.....so cute!

I love the way you are writing this in a series and though it's angsty it's believable conversation that two people would have in this situation (well, if they had ontae's personalities)

addicterated August 25 2012, 02:38:47 UTC

I always wanted to do this kind of. almost like vignettes... that gets down to the nitty gritty of what's going on between them without a lot of superficialities... just conversations between them...

and they are not ready to have a shower together bb... Jinki is happier now that he knows Taemin didn't fool around with anyone else... and Taemin feels better because he sort of... has discovered what he wanted... that this is who he is and he's not just "the virtual girl"...

I am glad you find it believable for them, because I find it believable for them too :)

Thank you!

imvus August 25 2012, 12:31:21 UTC

I understand (still pouting)about the shower and not being ready (it doesn't have to be sexual (lol ( ... )

k_a_r_l_a August 25 2012, 07:17:22 UTC

You know, I loved this one especially. It's so sad in a serious and not dramatic way. There is a lot of dialog and it was fluent. I just loved it. Loved it, loved it.

addicterated August 25 2012, 07:43:08 UTC

Thank you :) I'm exploring something here that's been on my mind a while. I'm so glad you liked it. New part is up :)

min7girl August 27 2012, 06:29:35 UTC

serious and needed talk, but with the ontae godILovethemsomuch cuteness.

Thank you!!!

seungjiyeon September 29 2012, 02:54:56 UTC

At least, Taemin didsn'T cheat on Jinki. I can unserstand Taemin. The way you describe it makes it palpable, and yes. But Taemin should've talked to Jinki, nonetheless. Even though Jinki can be overprotective, it can't be THAT bad, I think.

Key is incredible, but I didn't understand Minho's reaction.....

Thanks for sharing!