A/R REMIX: "Tipping Point"

[aka_plynn]

This wraps up our postings! Authors will be revealed (and can then repost to their journals) on Monday morning.

Title: Tipping Point
Rating: MA
Original story: A Balancing Act
Original author: surena_13

Comments

[defyingnormalcy]

This whole fic has such a gorgeous, sensual feel to it. I especially love how they took their time making love to one another, despite the urgent need to reconnect again. Your prose is so beautiful, and so many sentences stood out but I'll pick my favourite:

Her orgasm breaks over her like a sunrise, a gradual, blinding glow that warms her down to her bones and lingers just under her skin.

Guh. Just stunning. I love this image, and it sort of foreshadows Bill watching the sunrise without her on Earth 2.0. I loved the tragedy inherent in this metaphor, despite it's beauty.

Lovely work. :)

[aka_plynn]

I'm so glad you liked that metaphor. I wasn't sure if it quite worked, but that's just what I was going for. :)

Thank you very much!

[aka_plynn]

Having Laura at this place of "shit or get off the pot" toward Bill was a lot of fun to write. I'm really happy you enjoyed this. :)

[larsfarm77]

What a beautiful fic. I loved being in Laura's head here, how finished she is with the uneven ground they're on, and the rawness of her feelings when she lays it out and has to wait on him.

I'm also a sucker for NC, and this was just a beautiful description of how she's dealing with the aftermath:

Eventually she was able to disentangle those moments from what came after, so that when she brought them into the light they no longer pulled the darkness with them.

This is my favourite part (besides the amazing smut). It hits HARD:

If he says one word that even rhymes with “responsibilities”, I am going to strangle him where he stands.

“I don’t want to hurt you anymore than I already have.”

“Knocking me cold would have hurt less.”

Awesome work!

[aka_plynn]

Thank you! I'm a little in love with the idea of Laura getting impatient with Bill's foot-dragging, so that's always fun to write.

[somadanne]

This is just gorgeous and hot, so so hot, while keeping that perfect bit of angst between them.

This is such a great line--I just love the imagery of these memories pulling the darkness with them. What a perfect insight.

Eventually she was able to disentangle those moments from what came after, so that when she brought them into the light they no longer pulled the darkness with them.

I really like how you explored this time in their relationship. :)

[aka_plynn]

I'm relieved that you found it hot. LOL Writing smut gives me ulcers.

The line that you pulled about disentangling the memories is one I'm very proud of, because that whole process is a familiar one to me so it felt very real when I put it down.

Thank you. :)

[fragrantwoods]

This is such a perfect piece--the "choreography" was wonderful :-) I'm a sucker for things like her bra getting tangled in her hair and her having bumped her head on that shelf. It makes them so very real and turns the temperature up on the smut like wildfire.

I love that you don't flinch from how terribly sad it is that they've wasted time and there are still realities that will interfere, that they won't ever have that freedom of "eighty percent of his shore leave naked" again, but what a celebration that you showed them having enjoyed as much passion as we would want for them before the Cylons came back.

Lovely and lyrical. I love how you show them here :-D

[aka_plynn]

I love those little moments, too. Like you said, I feel like adding those little unsexy details can ground a fic and make it feel more real. I'm glad you enjoyed those. :)

And just because they can't be as free as they once were, that's no excuse to scrap the whole idea, right? At least that's what Laura was telling me as I wrote.

Thank you very much. :)