A/R REMIX: "Shadowlands"

Oct 29, 2012 11:27

Title: Shadowlands
Rating: MA
Original Author: larsfarm77
Original Story: Shadows and Light

Shadowlands )

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defyingnormalcy October 29 2012, 19:23:22 UTC
This just killed me, you had me in tears by the end! :(

It’s not fair.

*sobbing*

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wishflsinfl October 29 2012, 20:17:23 UTC
So, so heartbreaking and sad.

This line especially got to me:
the incongruence of the evidence of her arousal against the very clear proof of what is killing her is hard to comprehend.

I love how well they know each other and how neither of them is falling for the other's lies. Wonderfully done.

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fragrantwoods October 29 2012, 21:26:01 UTC
I can see this so clearly, everything winding down and him helpless, even though he is trying so hard to hang on to whatever it takes to make her feel like it's okay. So sad, and her wanting to be "fair" and her body failing just...gah. So much love and hurt.

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somadanne October 29 2012, 21:36:33 UTC
This is beautiful, absolutely beautiful--and has completely broken my heart. You have so many lines that just perfectly express this time for them.

This one:

He cannot spare her this grief, any more than he can cure her of her cancer.

And this:

There’s so little time left. I don’t want to waste it.” Her voice cracks on the last sentence, and she looks away as she tries to regain her composure.

And this:

willing heat into her chilled skin, life into the body that is falling down around her

And this:

the incongruence of the evidence of her arousal against the very clear proof of what is killing her is hard to comprehend.

This whole thing was beautiful and sad--watching Laura enjoy this last bit of pleasure while she can, and then falling asleep ... there's just so much depth here. And it's not fair. :(

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larsfarm77 October 30 2012, 00:53:55 UTC
I love this.

It's so beautiful and achey -- the idea that responsibility, stress and worry combine to try to steal these last few good moments from them just kills me. As does their resolve to fight it, to refuse to acknowledge it, to take these moments in spite of everything.

I adore what Laura says here:

“You’re right, Bill. I am tired. And so are you. And I know I don’t have to. But I want to. There’s so little time left. I don’t want to waste it.”

One of the things that always hits me so hard is just how much Bill loves her, that in the end he can't say no to her:

The sad smile she gives him breaks what is left of his resolve, and he pulls her towards him.

This is one of the most heartbreaking observations I've ever read:

the incongruence of the evidence of her arousal against the very clear proof of what is killing her is hard to comprehend.

And then this, Bill trying to will some control over everything he can't:

he runs his palms against the skin of her back as he takes deep, slow breaths of air, trying to lull her ( ... )

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