Comments | abyssinia4077: SG-1 ficlet: the selves we had to be

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SG-1 ficlet: the selves we had to be

Apr 20, 2007 13:56

Title: the selves we had to be
Author: abyssinia4077
Fandom: Stargate: SG-1
Characters: Sam Carter, Daniel Jackson
Rating/Warning PG, character death, spoilers for season 9 & 10 big bad
Disclaimer: The Stargate universe and characters belong to MGM and many others, none of whom are me.
Word Count: 862
Author's note: Written for the Reunion Challenge run by thassalia ( Read more... )

fic (type): challenges, fic (type): gen, fic (type): ficlets, fic: all, fic (fandom): stargate sg1

Comments 25

pellucid April 21 2007, 14:06:25 UTC

Oh wow! That's exactly what Daniel would have done, isn't it. Ouch--but yes. Absolutely.

(And what a great prompt this one is, too--I've been eyeing it but haven't come up with anything, so I'm glad someone has written something great for it!)

abyssinia4077 April 21 2007, 23:48:09 UTC

It's certainly one route I could imagine Daniel taking. Possibly not the one I'd like him to take because, as you said, ouch.

(it was a great prompt! I mean, the poem definitely has a more uplifting feel to it than the fic I wrote, but still, awesome poem. You could write something for it too!)

Thanks for commenting. I'm glad you liked it.

katie_m April 22 2007, 02:04:28 UTC

I'm all thrilled to see someone wrote for it! Though it's funny--I've seen responses to two prompts of mine now, and the one that I kind of expected to be sad was really pretty happy, and the one I expected to be reasonably happy--or at least peaceful, maybe--wasn't.

Don't get me wrong, though, I liked this. You really did do excellent Oma-speak.

abyssinia4077 April 22 2007, 02:36:50 UTC

It's a wonderful poem. And yeah, um, I expected it to be happy/peacefulish when I decided to write it and then this came out instead (I think maybe because I just saw "Prototype" and was thinking about how Daniel's changed and his guilt at bringing the Ori to the galaxy).

I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for offering up the prompt. And yay to the Oma!Speak working :)

Thanks for commenting.

sg_fignewton April 22 2007, 05:39:43 UTC

Heartbreaking and bleak and oooooh, Sam. I feel so much worse for her than Daniel, despite the clear picture of how much he's suffered. At least he didn't have to see all the things she's witnessed... although he's probably seen enough all on his own.

Loved the ticking off of time for her. And yes, her taking his hand was heartbreaking - along with She thinks he's trying to remember how to smile.

I'm glad they'll have each other now, at the very least.

abyssinia4077 April 22 2007, 11:38:07 UTC

Yeah, well, Daniel made his choice - even if he felt like he didn't really have a choice. Sam is being pulled over into the abyss with him, so definitely feel more sorry for her. I definitely think she's seen more of the galaxy - but he's certainly seen something (and maybe can see the rest in her mind?)

The ticking off of time was actually kinda fun to write. I tried a little to make the end mildly hopeful (in a melancholy away). They've found each other so the remnants of SG-1 are together again. They have hope for the future - hope they have a way to clean up the mistakes and let the future live on, even if they have to go down fighting. It's not all bad.

Thanks for commenting!

advection April 24 2007, 09:12:22 UTC

Lovely combination of grim and poetic and creepy and uplifting and poignant. I love the rhythm of it, the relentless and weary countdown in the opening two paragraphs and then the extended scene between the two of them, and the way it opens up into a beautiful cosmic grandness, and then focuses down again on the handclasp and the feel of the rain. And that last sentence, mmm. Really enjoyed this.

abyssinia4077 April 24 2007, 11:37:42 UTC

Thank you so much for the wonderful feedback. I'm really glad the tone/rhythm worked for you and the hopeful bits were visible within the grimness.

I'm so glad you liked it. Thanks for commenting!

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abyssinia4077 April 24 2007, 19:41:44 UTC

:)
I don't know if he'll succeed, it it's even possible to do. But if anyone can....

Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

_minxy_ April 24 2007, 17:42:13 UTC

OOOoooooohhhh, creepy and ethereal. Awesome. Love the faith in Daniel that says to abandon all the traditional ways of fighting and go into the unknown. Love that she reminds him about smiling.

Wow.

abyssinia4077 April 24 2007, 19:43:58 UTC

Daniel may appreciate the past, but he's often about non-traditional ways of dealing with things, especially with fighting. It makes sense he'd think "out of the box" like this. I'm curious whether he could succeed...

I almost think Sam could be the final step he needs - his relationships aren't burdens to be released but elements that make him stronger. Sam being there can remind him of his humanity, but possibly also help him on the path - find a different peace. Um. Yes. Smiling.

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.