Fic - the next bold move (Lizzie/Darcy) nc-17, 1/1

[abvj]

Title: the next bold move
Summary: The one with the first time.
Rating: nc-17
Author's Notes: 3,084 words. Set in the not too distant future. Written for the prompts first date, modern, bite marks at Porn Battle XIV. All mistakes are mine. These characters, however, are not.

Comments

[lapiccolina]

You.

ARE.

BRIIIIIIIIIIIILANT.

:fans self:

“Good,” he grins. Then, “You’re wearing my shirt,” he points out after a moment he adds needlessly, “in my bed.”
I don't know why I found this part so endearing - but I do.

I like the different speeds you took throughout the piece. Very well choreographed and it all just works. It would be awkward and yet full of meaning. I like the Lizzie tells him that she's modern and she's both proud and bashful as she says it.

I also like that she says Will instead of Darcy. It's a good shift and therefore more meaningful.

BRILLAINT!

[abvj]

<33333333

Thank you!!!!

[empressearwig]

Seriously, why do I even TRY to write in the same fandoms as you?!?!?!

This is disgustingly good. I hope you know that.

[abvj]

Because you are awesome and I love the way you write, so you can't ever quit!

Thanks for reading! I had waaaaaay too much fun writing this.

[magisterequitum]

Okay, never writing for them again.

I really love the opening bit with him counting her freckles. That's beyond cute and human. I love too the idea of them out and she wants to go home with them AND THE CAB!!! It's all just really humanistic and realistic. It's lovely. All of it.

[abvj]

Okay, never writing for them again.

I know this is a lie because they are irresistible with their stupid faces.

I AM PATIENTLY AWAITING D/E TO MAKE THIS DAY BETTER, JSYK. I CAN'T WAIT.

[petragem]

This is perfect. You are perfect. Everything is perfect.

[abvj]

Thank you!!!! I'm so glad you liked it.

And I love your icon

[tidbit2008]

At some point, I'm going to need to charge you for my extra lives. I think I'm about to run out.

BUT THIS IS SO GOOD THAT I DON'T CARE. Lolol. But srsly. Fantastic work. So much rich detail and also you know, insanely hot.

ahhhhhhh *scrolls back up to reread* :D

[abvj]

Thank you!!!!! I'm so glad you liked it because I had probably way too much fun writing it.