Fic - Break You Down (Logan, Veronica) R, 1/1

[abvj]

Title: Break You Down
Summary: That image of Lilly haunts her, and for months after her death Veronica swears every time she closes her eyes that is all she sees. All she dreams of.
Rating: R
Author's Notes: 3,400 words. Set pre-series.

Comments

[odintsova_27]

this is really good.

I have never read a fic set post-Lilly but pre-Veronica-is-an-outcast.

Very good job.

[abvj]

Thanks for the feedback. I've never read one either, which is I guess kind of what spurred this fic. I was a little tense about posting this, but I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks again for the feedback!

[afrocurl]

This is a really different take on the show pre-series, and it was really moving to read.

I've always wanted to know more about the Logan/Veronica friendship that existed before the show started and we find out that he's an OPJ to her. This was really great, in that I saw some of that OPJ starting to come out, and still have the knowledge that he needed to look out for Veornica.

The pain that Veronica realizes she doesn't have anyone else to turn to in her drunken state is also just perfect for her situation before she is totally cast off from the 09ers and this life.

Really wonderfully done!

[abvj]

I'm glad you see the Veronica/Logan friendship that way, becuase that's exactly how I intended it to be and I was slightly afraid it wouldn't come through. I always pictured them as held together more because of their relationships with Lilly and Duncan and less because of their relationship with each other. All the other stuff comes afterwards.

Thanks for the feedback, it's greatly appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[sweetumms33]

“I mean, Jesus, Veronica, you walk around this place acting like the cross you bear because of this… mess, is yours and yours alone.”

This is such an interesting line. I wonder if that's what it was like, why he was so angry at her. Really great story, loved it.

[abvj]

To me, Veronica always seems like someone who is very all about herself and definitely all about self preservation (don't hate me) with right, of course. She deserves it after all the hell she's been put through.

That is actually the line I had in mind when I started writing this fic. I think that is how Logan could have very well felt - especially since Veronica would have been so wrapped up in her own grieving and worrying about Duncan as well. But we will never know for sure, will we? I hope that makes sense.

Thanks for reviewing and my apologies for not responding sooner. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

[meezardra]

This took me over an hour to read because I kept turning my head to my right and staring out the window, thinking and visualizing line, after line, after line in my head.
I thought this was so good I'm now going to write my own before-and-after Lilly situation.

[abvj]

I'm glad that you enjoyed this and even more so that people are reading it. I'm addicted to feedback.

I thought this was so good I'm now going to write my own before-and-after Lilly situation.

When you do, please let me know, I'd love to read it. I've been searching high and low for this type of fic - which I think is rather sparse. I'd love to see someone else do a take on it.

[northern_rain]

That was so good! Loved Veronica calling Logan and him not in total psychotic jackass mode yet. The ending with the hints about her mum worked well.

Great fic

[abvj]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed readin this. I actually toyed with taking the last part out and just leaving Veronica looking back as Logan leaves, but then I wrote it and I became attatched, and I guess I kind of liked the way it just forshadows everything that is about to happen in canon.

Thanks for the feedback!

[evie_oh]

This was really cool. Like everyone else has said, there aren't a lot of fics set in this timeframe, so it was cool to read yours. It seemed really in character for both of them too.

I really liked this line:
Lilly - who was not so perfect, but always perfect to her - tainted. Ruined.

and this:
Those lifeless eyes turn and it is almost as if she is staring straight at Veronica.

“Everything’s going to change now, Veronica. Everything.”

That was a great ending!

[abvj]

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed this. I re-did the ending at least three times, and surprisingly the one that ended up in the fic was the one I least like, but I'm glad you liked it. It makes me feel better lol.