New; Crime & Punishment Challenge

[kayki2487]

Where is she?

Why won't she come to us?

There is barely any of Damian left in this horrible shell of a corpse.  Just enough presence of mind left to know that she left.

Deserted us.

She's punishing us.  We must have done something wrong.

But we would do anything for her.

We would die a true death for her.  End

Comments

[sabriel_0405]

This was terrific. I loved the imagery and could easily imagine his terror and his pain.

[kayki2487]

Thanks everybody! :)

[waterfall8484]

Welcome and thanks for your participation! :~) (Does anyone know how to make a vampire Smiley?)

Ah... poor Damian! I got a distinkt Gollum-scitzophrenic feeling from this - I like it! You know someone is in trouble when he starts thinking of himself as "we"...

[kayki2487]

Thanks! And I actually thought of Gollum when I was writing this, I'm glad someone else saw it too!