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[abraxan]

okay, i lied. (but i didn't mean to, honest!)

edited; much thanks to jan and __ariel for taking the time to pick through it.

for aefallen, because she completely egged me on, although this didn't quite turn out the way you (or i, for that matter) imagined

Comments

[carmelised]

Very pretty idea, I think. I do like the repetition in the last paragraph (: I did warn you I was feeling picky and here goes:

'soft firmness'
I've never believed in oxymorons.

"What's that you got there?"
What's that you've got there?

'chemical crystals'
You just had to spoil the mood with a techy term *grumbles*

'he's excused himself to run out of the trailer and into the washroom as he unzips his jeans'
And he unzips his jeans while excusing himeself and running to the washroom. And nobody drools?

And, methinks you have far too many 'comma-ed' descriptions (if you know what I mean), for such a short drabble. But I don't know what you can do about un-comma-ing them lol. Just leave them - t'would be best. Anyway, it's just a matter of style. Spiderman isn't my fandom though, so I'll always be a bit biased. But on the whole, much prettiness. Always loved your descriptions haha.

(ah sorry for the whole load of deleted comments haha)

[abraxan]

I've never believed in oxymorons.
Um. I do? ^^;

"What's that you got there?"
Meant to be slang, this.

techy term
._. Is it really that bad?

And he unzips his jeans while excusing himeself and running to the washroom.
My bad. (I blush way too much while writing almost-smut to think coherently and logically. ^^;)

Will do editing, like, tonight or something.

[abraxan]

Um. I do? ^^;

Regarding this, actually - I mean, is it really an oxymoron? ^^; Because, for things like cushions and soft toys, I really do think they can be both soft and firm. Kind of a texture versus (for the lack of a better word) toughness sort of thing.

Er. Yes. I don't make sense.

[aefallen]

I AM HIGH AND IN A MELBOURNE AIRPORT WITH NO TIME AND AND AND AND -

You've done it again, you brilliant girl.

I *completely* owe you fic.

*CLINGS TO YOU*

YOU DID IT!

*HEARTS YOU OBSESSIVELY*

I have City By the Sea and the 4-DVD Spider-man 1 set. ANYTIME YOU'RE FREE. LET ME KNOW. *HEARTS*

[aefallen]

Just read your previous entry! YOUR EXAMS! *wails*

*hugs you* Don't worry! All the best! *smiles*

(You know, I never write that well during the exams!)

Didn't manage to find Freaks and Geeks - it had to be ordered in, and it was A$100 even so. But you can bet I'll be trying in the UK. ; )

[abraxan]

!!!!!

I *heart* you so much, I have no words!

I *completely* owe you fic.

Would this be one where drunk!Harry and drunk!Peter end up frolicking under a Chinese restaurant table? ^_~

[selfinduced]

mrow. hot.

i love RPS. *paws at your candyfloss*

[abraxan]

hot.

*in shock*

Because I was totally blushing my face off while writing just that little bit of almost-smut even though no one was watching, and I can't write smut no matter how much I try, so.

But - so glad you like!

[selfinduced]

*scrunches up face and grins*

you'll get there eventually. in the meantime, i'm definitely applauding your 'almost' attempts. *g*

[gravi_girl123]

that was *so* good. and it ended so perfectly. I could just picture it all. A very hot and well written drabble ^_~!!

[abraxan]

Thank you! ^^;

I was wondering if the ending was a bit of an overkill, because, er, this was actually supposed to be fluff. But I'm so glad you liked!

[kc_risenphoenix]

Interesting...wish this would have been more than a drabble... I want to see what happens next. And I don't just mean the sexual possiblities...

[kc_risenphoenix]

Oh... What in the world in candly floss? And I think it is interesting that James calls his Mom/Mother/Ma "Mum." I've never know an American to use the word "Mum," how cool that you found out that tidbit! How did you find that out?

[abraxan]

"Candyfloss" and "mum" - both unfortunate and careless results of my Brit English background. They *should* be "cotton candy" and "mom" - thanks for reminding me!

And I'm really glad you liked the fic! It actually originated from a weird dream I had, and it was *supposed* to end in fluffy smut, but it kind of...just turned out this way.