LJ Idol Week 5 - When We Were Hunting Rabbits

[abigailendersby]

In the dead of winter they're a flash of white on white, a blur of kicking legs and twitching ears and coal-black eyes weaving among the stick-thin birch trunks and wind-crested snowdrifts. Sometimes you only see the hints of their rapid departure, the miniature flurries of snow kicked from low-lying branches and the quiver of underbrush, the tiny

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[kathrynrose]

My dad was a big hunter, but he couldn't take me with him, because I'd warn the critters, and cry if they shot something. (I tend to like just about any animal more than I like most people.) :)

[abigailendersby]

Oh so true, I always prefer the company of animals to humans. :)

[penpusher]

Of course, you know, this means war!

I still remember the first time I had rabbit. It was in Paris and it was quite tasty!

Haven't had it since.

[abigailendersby]

BRING IT YOU WASCALLY WABBIT.

I can barely bring myself to eat rabbit anymore. I had it at a restaurant with my husband last year and it was the first time I'd eaten it since I was a child.

[halfshellvenus]

I liked how you flipped the prompt here, and the glimpse of childhood time spent between father and daughter. I know the activity itself is unsettling to many (most of us many worlds away from hunting for food), but it felt authentic and fully told from the narrator's perspective.

[abigailendersby]

Thank you very much! It was hard because I was trying to carefully work the transition from the innocent kid spending time in the woods with her father (something I did quite a bit as a child) to the adult keeping humans in pits in the woods (something I definitely have not done as an adult)... perhaps a bit too carefully as I don't think most people noticed the poor girl in the pit. XD

[halfshellvenus]

o_O. Well, that was definitely too subtle for me! Even re-reading, I still keep coming up with "rabbits."

[kickthehobbit]

I really love this-it was easy to picture what was happening and things flowed very smoothly, which I find doesn't always happen with present-tense. It's very tight and ends perfectly-well done!

[abigailendersby]

Thanks so much! <3

[kajel]

Nicely done! I enjoyed the glimpse of your childhood.

[eska818]

I really hope this wasn't her childhood, as there is a woman trapped in a pit while they're hunting rabbits. ;)