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...Therefore I Am - Chapter 2

Apr 22, 2013 03:01

Title: ...Therefore I Am - Chapter 2
Author: AotA
Rating: K
Characters: Jazz
Summary: Prowl is human, Jazz is... not. And Prowl thinks that it should probably be the other way around.
Notes: One last part to go. I am not going to let myself be suckered into writing more than that. Don't even try. I've got my eyes on you sneaky fraggers. >:|

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post type: fic, fic length: fic, fandom: transformers, transformers: jazz, series: cogito ergo sum

Comments 19

lobaeclipse April 22 2013, 15:30:16 UTC

Oh, this is lovely. It's strange, but it works. I like that you reveal details as they're needed instead of flooding readers with an infodump (though the first scene in chapter one threw me a bit and I had to read it over again). I can't wait to see how Prowl reacts!

ace_of_the_arts April 22 2013, 17:06:47 UTC

I'm glad that the level of detail worked for you because I don't normally bother with it unless it is important. The only reason I did this time, especially for Chapter 2, was because Jazz was fascinated by the details.

(I hate infodumps: Jazz had dark, mocha colored skin. He wore a shiny blue visor over his eyes and had thick black braids that fell down to his shoulders. When he smiled, his teeth were white and dimples appeared. He wore a white shirt with a blue and red stripe running down it and black sweats with while marks on it to make them look athletic. *barf barf barf*)

I find perversely pleased by the fact that Chapter 1 threw you a bit, because the GitS always threw me off when I watched it the first time and would always watch it again to glean the details. >:)

femme4jack April 22 2013, 15:39:46 UTC

Oh, I LOVE it. Also, Prowl "owning" Jazz makes a very interesting reversal from EYNW. Jazz's response to having his own body is delightful.

Yet another fascinating world you are building here!

ace_of_the_arts April 22 2013, 17:13:33 UTC

No love for SaS 6? T_T

Jazz doesn't mind belonging to Prowl, even though he is really a person (despite the fact that he wasn't intended to be, nor suspected to be because AI in this fic are still not comparable to humans, even though Jazz was made to learn) because Prowl treats him like a person. Better even, because Prowl cares about Jazz-the-constant-companion when he's so disconnected from the rest of humanity.

Jazz is enamored himself. :)

I'm not going to let myself be suckered into writing more than one more chapter for this ficlet. >:|

femme4jack April 22 2013, 17:43:35 UTC

I just read S&S 6 - catching up this morning. SO MUCH LOVE.

kageokami666 April 22 2013, 15:53:20 UTC

OMG I can't wait to see them meet for the first time like this. I'm pretty sure Prowl will be surprised to say the least

ace_of_the_arts April 22 2013, 17:13:57 UTC

Surprise is one way to put it. :)

kageokami666 April 22 2013, 17:56:22 UTC

Any other character I would expect full scale melt down, Prowl is a lovely conundrum for what people do with him in these sort of situations.

Though I right now find myself feeling a little bad for Prowl he is in a way loosing "Jazz-the-constant-companion" since he will no longer be in his head. find myself hoping he gains him in another way to make up for that

exactly_what April 22 2013, 16:37:59 UTC

Ooh, this is really cool. :D I can't wait to see Prowl's reaction to Jazz... ^.^

ace_of_the_arts April 22 2013, 17:15:35 UTC

I'm happy that the coolness came across. Let's just say that he'll be pretty surprised... >:)

exactly_what April 22 2013, 17:44:32 UTC

hehehe.. can't wait to see it! :D

gilded_orchid April 22 2013, 22:57:10 UTC

Oh man, you make me miss GiTS (especially the SA complex) sooo much!

Anyway, the level of detail in this chapter was gorgeous. You had so much detail into Jazz's discovering and exploration of his own senses (at least sight/sound), that I was actually able to envision it. Needless to say, awesomesauce.

I can't wait to see how Prowl reacts to Jazz's surprise. (And I know it's already been said, but it's extremely interesting to see Jazz as the more non-human component when usually Prowl carries that role.)

Well, I'm snared! ^__^

ace_of_the_arts April 23 2013, 20:31:33 UTC

I miss GitS too. I can't wait until ARISE comes out! ^^ (If I could, I'd emulate the GitS style, but I love the series enough that's it's long intimidated me in that arena.)

Awesome. I like hearing that the detail came out right because there is a delicate balance between giving enough details to make something vivid enough that the mind can shade in the rest and going over the top into *yawn* territory, or even into the realm of adjective-vomit. Bleck.