Shards V

[ace_of_the_arts]

Title: Shards V
Author: AotA
Rating: T
Warnings: discussion of a glowering Prowl’s interfacing habits (This fic is not going to have a feel good ending. At all. They will have a chance, but it’s still not a nice/happy ending. It’s actually going to be sad and/or sparkbreaking.)
Characters: Ironhide, Jazz, Prowl, Cliffjumper, Ratchet
Setting: very AU tf-

Comments

[renegadewriter8]

Oh no what are they going to do to Jazz!? LOL Ironhide! hahahahaha poor Prowl, he doesn't get enough credit. UPDATE SOON!

[ace_of_the_arts]

UPDATING SOON!

Yes, Ironhide's mind was blown.

Jazz: It was an accident!

[kagome37]

Great chapter. Prowl and Jazz broke Ironhide. lol. I would think if you said everything was find and ask for a medic in the same breathe the person or mech on the other end will think something is wrong. I love how Cliffjumper out and decided it was better not to know. I love how Ratchet fall in the 5% category of "mechs associated with Prowl associated him with acts of inter-mech intimacy". I love how Prowl phrases things.

Just a few things. "or I will drag out and down the corridor screaming if need be so that I can check you out in the medical bay again.” I think you need to have "you" between "drag" and "out". and “Welcome online, Ironhide!” should be “Welcome back to the online, Ironhide!”

[ace_of_the_arts]

I think it's amusing that Jazz didn't even expect it to happen, even though he wanted to break Ironhide's mind.

The way I write Prowl gives him recognizable speech patterns and I'm glad that you like them. Believe it or not, it's very easy for me to write the type of officialese that Prowl's lines are influence by.

Thanks for noting my errors, I have fixed them. \m/

[anontfwriter]

Brilliant chapter!!

[ace_of_the_arts]

Thanks! \m/

[sideslip_tf]

Wow, what an attitude Jazz has! That's really funny. Great how Ironhide just couldn't deal with it.