i love this poem, especially the part about the man passing out tracts NOT giving one to the spare changer,who was probably praying for some ducats to fill that cup. i'm not sure about the last 3 lines, and i will confess i may not like it cuz i'm a christian and i don't believe salvation is luck, (oh wait, oh effin' wait: it IS luck, if somehow you never HEAR about the gospel than how would you know. excellent point miss r.) It was more the last the two lines, because God in my world is master over weather and no thing can tie His hands.
It's very difficult for me to assess (religious= spiritual) poetry because I have to read it from my POV and I worry that will inter with the goodness of the writer's work. But until those last three lines, I was movin' with you like a waltz. And I hope this doesn't interfere with our friendship...I think yr a stunning poet and a stunning human being.
i wrote you a post & it didn't appearrobin_ruleSeptember 26 2007, 22:36:41 UTC
i'll try again: i love this poem, especially the part about the man giving out tracts passing by the man with the cup who surely was praying for some ducats to fill his cup. That tract could have changed his life..(perfect irony)
The last three lines i had trouble with because i don't believe salvation is luck and i read (religious=spiritual) poetry from my own POV; but WAIT, wait an effin' minute, in this case salvation was luck because if the spare changer didn't hear/read the gospel, he missed out. Not his fault. It was more the last two lines I see that bothered me, (they are well-written, yr line breaks are good, yr intention is strong), but because of my belief, I don't see weather dictating to God, nor tying his hands. So there you have it: a poem that is perfectly written, i just disagree with two lines. I hope this doesn't interfere with our friend ship. Yr a stunning poet, a stunning human being...
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It's very difficult for me to assess (religious= spiritual) poetry because I have to read it from my POV and I worry that will inter with the goodness of the writer's work. But until those last three lines, I was movin' with you like a waltz. And I hope this doesn't interfere with our friendship...I think yr a stunning poet and a stunning human being.
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i love this poem, especially the part about the man giving out tracts passing by the man with the cup who surely was praying for some ducats to fill his cup. That tract could have changed his life..(perfect irony)
The last three lines i had trouble with because i don't believe salvation is luck and i read (religious=spiritual) poetry from my own POV; but WAIT, wait an effin' minute, in this case salvation was luck because if the spare changer didn't hear/read the gospel, he missed out. Not his fault. It was more the last two lines I see that bothered me, (they are well-written, yr line breaks are good, yr intention is strong), but because of my belief, I don't see weather dictating to God, nor tying his hands. So there you have it: a poem that is perfectly written, i just disagree with two lines. I hope this doesn't interfere with our friend ship. Yr a stunning poet, a stunning human being...
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