Asphyxiation

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Title: Asphyxiation
Author: nieded
Fandom, Pairing: House MD, Wilson-centric (slight House/Wilson if you put your 3D glasses on backwards)
Rating: R for language
Disclaimer: I don't own any characters from House, MD.
Author's Notes: Thanks to sushi_denim for listening to be go on and on and on for this story. Thank you Clay Aiken for inspiring me to write a mer!

Comments

Asphyxiation

[dominus_trinus]

I was teary-eyed at the end of this...your descriptions are vivid, the tone is perfect, I adore the supernatural/mythical element (obviously well-researched, which made me love it even more). Wilson's state of mind is portrayed realistically and is achingly poignant...the gravity of the last line is astounding. I wished Wilson had said goodbye to House, but it was inevitable that it would happen the way it did (endings, in my opinion, should always be inevitable). Your parenthetical additions to the prose also worked wonderfully--I suppose what I'm trying to say I that I loved it, full stop

Re: Asphyxiation

[nieded]

Wow,

I'm sorry I didn't respond to this sooner! I was just zooming through some of my older stuff when I came across your response. Thank you so much! Your sonnet is wonderful. I've always sucked at writing metric poetry, and I love these lines:

The quiet, gentle ebb and flow of tides
And salt-sea like a blanket round his skin-
Intoxicating secret, one he hides
For he can’t bear to have his friend look in.

I'm really flattered. Thank you.