Comments | __vam: Tinkerbelle Pt. 3

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Tinkerbelle Pt. 3

Jun 11, 2010 22:04

Title: The Lost Boys
Author: silver_sixpence
Rating: PG-13
Pairings: Post-Vam
Disclaimer: Reality is that which, when you stop believing in it, doesn't go away -- Philip K. Dick
Summary: How do you deal with a pain you can't explain? How can you face those tangible ghosts when you know it's only a memory dream?
Author's Note: I wasn't expecting to write ( Read more... )

rating:pg-13, fic:series, genre:supernatural, author:s

Comments 10

bluespire June 12 2010, 07:05:39 UTC

Holy shit!!! Wow, That was brilliant and amazing and so tragic. I loved the part where Bam said Ville's name and the feeling that overwhelmed Ville. So perfect that Bam's command was to love him. I'm on my phone or I'd write more. This was stunning, really.

bluespire June 12 2010, 07:07:55 UTC

How in the hell did I get FC? Yay!

asilversixpence June 14 2010, 04:07:38 UTC

Haha, thanks, that was one of my favorite parts to write. Ville has been so emotionally invested in Bam in this story, even if he appeared to do otherwise. Him being overwhelmed for this chapter just seemed fitting. :)

slasher48 June 12 2010, 07:16:06 UTC

There's a bunch of hads missing in there, sweets (for the past perfect tense "Ville had watched... Bam had fought again". Since you're using the recent past as the main tense, anything that's being remembered before this current period of time is a flurry of hads and 'd...

Plus, a few spelling errors.

to*
though* (those are the first two, might be more...)

As for the story, Jesus fucking Christ, woman.

You just kill me with your magnificence.

And I seriously. I just can't even speak after that.

It's beyond incredible. ♥

asilversixpence June 14 2010, 04:13:13 UTC

Yeah, my grammar was all over the place with this one. *flails hands*

Haha, your impossibly wonderful comments always manage to make me a little bit more confident. Thanks! ;) <3

alicez17 June 12 2010, 09:00:50 UTC

What a beautiful, bittersweet ending to this tale.

Though it was disturbing at times, you never managed to keep the heart-wrenching element from returning in each part. For example:

" “Come back to me.”

With a harsh gasp those blind eyes snapped into focus."

Amazing. Really:)

asilversixpence June 14 2010, 04:17:17 UTC

Ending??? Who said anything about this being the ending? LOL. I don't even know. Who am I to say? I'm not quite satisfied if the story just dropped off even if the angst here is quite appealing...so I'll probably write something else. IDK.

Hmm, disturbing and heart wrenching. Sounds like a good combo, lol!

:)

calvaryscars June 14 2010, 14:14:45 UTC

AH. I WISH I'D SEEN THIS SOONER. I LOVE IT MORE THAN LIFE ITSELF. YOU WILL BE WRITING MORE, YES? YES!

:)

asilversixpence June 14 2010, 14:51:57 UTC

WELL, SURPRISE! AH, BB YOU'RE MAKING ME BLUSH. REALLY? AND YOU KNOW I HAVE TOO. YES!

:)

annushkazhivago June 16 2010, 06:12:34 UTC

I wasn't especting more. I liked it!