Hit and Miss Part Two...

[9_things]

 

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[open_embrace]

you know all the stuff i said about evocative dialouge and lack of other description in the prequel? copy paste it here, ok? fantastic job.

and its just totally killing me with the melty sappy sweetness of it all. but in a very Jayne and Zoe way, which makes it cuter :P

again, there are a few spots that need commas and stuff like that, and i spotted a "to" that should have been a "too"... well, i thought i did, but i cant find it... and there are two section breaker things that need carriage returns around them.

and dude, seriously... that last three words... *swoon* So adorable.

[9_things]

:D I wanted this to be a bit soppy but still be Zoe/Jayne so \O/. Thank you, I shall hunt out that darn too.